Resources:Episode 24 Draft 1 (Translation)

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The first early draft of Episode 24 printed in the magazine JUNE Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-1-1.htm. According to that source, the drafts were credited to Akio Satsukawa (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with Anno in nine other episodes, including Episode 6, Episode 9, Episode 15 and Episode 21. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then he reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.[1][2] These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified. As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected them.

There are several scenes and plot elements that were removed or moved to other episodes, indicating how early in conceptualizing the story Anno and staff were when these drafts were written. For instance, Shinji playing the cello was Satsukawa's idea according to Anno[3], but Anno had this removed from this episode and he instead moved it to Episode 15, another Satsukawa episode, using it to make Asuka kiss Shinji. Anno also goes at length about how he changed the scene to a public bath specifically because it was a casual occurrence, specially in the countryside that he is from.[4][5] Anno also mentions he fixed up the later script in a more final form. This script is available in Evangelion Original III, it is the first one that includes Anno in the credits, and is very similar to the version aired in Episode 24, with a few plot-related differences. That is in fact the one considered as the "original script" in production notes. It was followed by the storyboards, a refined script sent to the seiyuu, and the final one published on the DVDs. Some other interviews also indicate Kaworu's change from his more neutral earlier self as a little boy with a pet cat was mostly Satsukawa's idea[6], much like the execution of the episode was rushed and reception to it came largely as a surprise to staff, who were unaware of what the episode might be interpreted as.[7][8] It's also worth taking into account that Kaworu is apparently the only character not to be named by Anno himself, but by Satsukawa, so it seems he had a lot more input in modifying this character early on and these drafts stand as an example of that, even though most of his ideas didn't make past Anno's approval.[9][10]

Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of Lilith in Terminal Dogma in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.[11] This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. Yamashita, for instance, wanted Asuka to become a werewolf. In Evangelion 2.0, Enokido wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.[12]

See also: Resources:Episode 24 Draft 2 (Translation)


English Translation

Translation by Good Haro. Translator's notes are in { brackets }.

NEON GENESIS EVANGELION EPISODE 24 "THE FINAL ANGEL" (FIRST DRAFT)

INT. NERV HQ - CAGE

In one corner a humanoid weapon, about 5 meters in length, is submerged in coolant.
On its body are the markings, "αーTYPEーEVA000."
Standing on the umbilical bridge before it are Ikari Gendou and Fuyutsuki Kouzou.

IKARI: The new Eva prototype: α Eva.

FUYUTSUKI: The miniature Evangelion, was it? What need do we have for something like this now of all times?

IKARI: It was created for the Human Instrumentality Project. This is the prototype.

FUYUTSUKI: Wasn't there a need to make some arrangements [to reach] the site? There are quite a few people asking questions about the freeze on Unit 00's repairs. Professor Akagi is taking matters into her own hands to find another Eva pilot.

IKARI: Let her keep at it a little longer. Plan E still isn't complete. According to SEELE's script, there's still one Angel remaining.


THE FINAL ANGEL


INT. NERV HQ - TEST PLUGS, CONTROL ROOM

MISATO: How's it going?

IBUKI: Not well. These are the worst numbers the two of them have made yet.

Asuka and Rei are shown in their test plugs on a monitor.

MISATO: Any idea what's causing it?

IBUKI: We don't have a clear answer yet, but the data shows that both of their sync rates tend to fluctuate. Asuka's numbers are probably a result of mental stress while Rei's are probably physical.

MISATO: There's no way either of them could pilot an Eva like this, huh. I guess this sort of thing was unavoidable with the main pilots. This is probably why Ritsuko's been running around these past few weeks trying to find a replacement pilot.

IBUKI: This'll be the first pilot who doesn't come from the Marduk report. I'm a little worried. I can't help but think that Professor Akagi is being a little overzealous this time. Haven't you noticed it? She's been in such a hurry lately.

MISATO: ……


EXT. THE OUTSKIRTS OF TOKYO-3, IN FRONT OF THE TURNSTILES OF A TRAIN STATION - AFTERNOON

A single car is parked by the station. Ritsuko and Shinji are waiting for their train.
Ritsuko tries to light the cigarette in her mouth, but a sudden wind prevents her.
Shinji spontaneously reaches out with his palm to block the wind.

RITSUKO: Thanks. (She lights the cigarette.) Shinji, you're always looking out for other people, aren't you? I bet you don't even get a break at home, do you?

SHINJI: Oh, not at all. Plus, the three of us are rarely together these days. Misato's always os busy and Asuka's doing overtime for testing so they never get back until evening.

RITSUKO: I guess I'm the one who's been sowing the seeds of your house's ruin.

SHINJI: It's not your fault. Work is work after all. Though, there is one thing that's been bugging me. Misato seems to be drinking more.

RITSUKO: –––Shinji, have you ever fallen in love?

SHINJI: Not yet…

RITSUKO: In Misato's heart, Kaji was a physically a part of her. Now that he's gone, it's finally hit her. But, some times those painful feelings become so overwhelming, it becomes unbearable. And on those nights, sometimes [we {general}] need to rely on the power of alcohol just a bit.

A special train pulls into the platform.

SHINJI: Will I understand that sort of thing better once I've fallen in love?

RITSUKO: When you understand it, it means you've become an adult. –––Alright. The Fifth Child is here.

The special train pulls out of the station.
A young boy wearing a cute, navy sailor suit remains on the platform. (Nagisa Kaworu)
Kaworu stands in the heat haze.
He sparkles against the light of the setting sun, his hair the color of honey.
Shinji is unconsciously bewitched by his divine beauty.
Shinji meets Kaworu's gaze. His heart pounds.


INT. GEOFRONT - LOBBY OF THE CEILING BUILDING {er, does 天井ビル have a more common translation re: Eva?}

Kaworu is meeting the three Eva pilots.
Misato and Ritsuko stand next to Kaworu.

RITSUKO: This is the fifth candidate we've selected, Nagisa Kaworu.

KAWORU: I'm Nagisa Kaworu. Pleased to meet you.

ASUKA: (Her eyes sparkle.) I'm Asuka. Soryuu Asuka Langley. Nice to meet 'cha.

She shakes his hand.

RITSUKO: This is the First Child, Ayanami Rei.

KAWORU: Pleased to meet you.

REI: (Deadpan as always.) You too.

They shake hands and for just an instant look at each other.
Misato looks over to Shinji, who looks a bit forlorn.


INT. NERV HQ - PHOTO ROOM

Kaworu faces forward and a flash goes off.


INT. SAME AREA, DIFFERENT ROOM

Kaworu's ID card comes off the printer.

MISATO: (Picking it up.) Nagisa Kaworu… He's quite the beauty.

RITSUKO: He's more than just a pretty face. Apparently he's at the top of his class and his athletic ability is prodigy-level too.

MISATO: I hope Shinji doesn't develop an [inferiority] complex over him. He doesn't take [this kind of stress very well]. He seemed a little down today too.

RITSUKO: (Giving Misato a sidelong glance) You worry too much…


EXT. CENTRAL HOSPITAL - AERIAL VIEW

KENSUKE'S VOICE: Suuup

TOUJI'S VOICE: Oh, that you, Kensuke? Come to visit your sick pal?


INT. CENTRAL HOSPITAL - TOUJI'S ROOM

Touji is on the bed and Kensuke has come to visit.

KENSUKE: I asked the receptionist, but are you really getting discharged tomorrow?

TOUJI: Yeah. I think things'll be going pretty well for me starting next week.

KENSUKE: When you're all better, are you going to pilot again?

TOUJI: Nah, they decided to give me a break. They didn't really try very hard to keep me so they must not have been expecting much from me in the first place. Wahahaha. (He gives a melancholy smile.)

KENSUKE: Oh…

TOUJI: So, how's school been?

KENSUKE: Well, I guess it's about as normal as it gets. Though, we did get a transfer student recently.


INT. KENSUKE'S VIDEO

Inside the classroom, Kaworu writes his name on the blackboard.

KENSUKE'S VOICE: His name is Nagisa Kaworu. I guess he's what you'd call a pretty-boy.

TOUJI'S VOICE: He pales in comparison to me though.

Finished writing, Kaworu turns around.

KENSUKE'S VOICE: Check out the girls' reactions.

The girls being excited.

TOUJI'S VOICE: So the bitches are showing their true colors. {'bitches' sounds a bit harsh even for Touji but he's using メス which is pretty damn rude, I don't remember if he uses it in the series though}

Lunch time. A bunch of girls are chatting with Kaworu in the courtyard.

KENSUKE'S VOICE: He's only just transferred in and he already has a fan club. I wouldn't be surprised if every girl at school was in it. Save a very tiny fraction.

Rei rests her chin on her hands, disinterested.

TOUJI'S VOICE: Well, she's always like that.

The camera pans over to Asuka, looking dejected.

KENSUKE'S VOICE: Soryuu looks pretty down, doesn't she? And she's usually the most energetic person in class.

In the morning she was screwing around with everyone like usual, but, now, the transfer student came, and apparently he's going to be an Eva pilot too. I bet Soryuu sees him as a rival. Apparently her sync tests with Unit 02 haven't been going well lately.

When Asuka notices the camera focused on her, she throws something at it.
Followed by video noise.


INT. TOUJI'S HOSPITAL ROOM AGAIN

Kensuke closes the video screen.

KENSUKE: So, this new transfer student's already being called the Prince of the class after just three days.

TOUJI: I dunno anything about princes, but I don't like this guy.

KENSUKE: Suzuhara, you're always like that with the newcomers. I think you hated all the transfer students. Even Shinji, if I recall correctly!

TOUJI: How is that Shinji kid doing anyway?


INT. SCHOOL, CLASSROOM 2-A - AFTER SCHOOL

Shinji is sitting at his seat, burying his face between his arms on his desk.
No one else is in the room but him.
We hear piano playing coming from somewhere.
Hikari comes in to get her bag.

HIKARI: Oh, Ikari, you're here?

SHINJI: (Lifts his head.) Yeah……

HIKARI: I thought you'd gone with Aida to visit Susuhara in the hospital.

SHINJI: It's…. complicated.

HIKARI: (Noticing the piano.) Nagisa's playing. He's really good, isn't he? –––Well, I'm off.

SHINJI: Bye.

Alone again, Shinji listens to the piano in his deep melancholy.


EXT. SHINJI'S MEMORY - THE STATION

He meets Kaworu's gaze and smiles.

KAWORU: Pleased to meet you.

SHINJI: (Stuttering) S-Same here.

Shinji blushes and hangs his head.


INT. SCHOOL - MUSIC ROOM

Kaworu playing the piano.


INT. CLASSROOM 2-A

The piano piece ends at a sort of unnatural point.

SHINJI: ……



INT. SCHOOL - MUSIC ROOM

Shinji ever so timidly opens the door.
––No one's inside.
We hear footsteps going down stairs.


INT. SCHOOL - STAIRS

Shinji runs down the stairs.
But he can't seem to catch up with the footsteps.
At which point the PA system comes on and the string piece "Winter" from Vivaldi's Four Seasons plays over the speakers.

ANNOUNCER: It's time to go home. Any students left on campus, please prepare to head home immediately.


EXT. SCHOOL YARD - DUSK

The end-of-the-school-day broadcast echos throughout the yard.
The various athletic club students [stream by] as their practices end.
Shinji looks around as he leaves the building, but Kaworu is nowhere to be seen.
As the athletic club members are cleaning up, they all look up at the sky at once.
–––It's started raining.
Even though the sun is still shining, large drops of rain fall from the sky. {I thought it was supposed to be dusk already!}
The students rush into the school building.
Shinji is enveloped by the golden rain.


EXT. THE ROAD HOME

Kaworu walks home alone with an umbrella in the sun shower.
Someone comes running from behind him and overtakes him.
It's Shinji, completely soaked.
When Shinji notices Kaworu, he stops in his tracks.
Kaworu raises his umbrella a bit and smiles.

SHINJI: ––

Kaworu raises his umbrella again.
Shinji hesitates a bit before joining Kaworu under the umbrella.

KAWORU: Heading to Nerv?

SHINJI: Yeah……

KAWORU: Let's go together then.

The two walk together.


INT. REI'S ROOM

Rei is drying herself off when something catches her eye and she looks out the window.
There's a vivid rainbow over Tokyo-3.

REI: ……


INT. NERV HQ - THIRD LAB

Asuka enters and tries to raise the ramp to Unit 02.

ASUKA: Alright, I wonder if both me and Unit 02 are in good condition today.

RITSUKO'S VOICE: (Over the PA) Wait a second. I'm sorry, but Asuka you're on standby.

ASUKA: Standby…

RITSUKO'S VOICE: The Fifth Child will be taking Unit 02 today.

We see Shinji and Kaworu in their plugsuits on an upper landing.

KAWORU: I thought you hated me, Shinji.

SHINJI: Why……?

KAWORU: I kinda got the feeling you were avoiding me.

SHINJI: I wasn't trying to.

KAWORU: Really?

SHINJI: Really……

We hear Kaworu and Shinji giggling.

ASUKA: ……


INT. NERV HQ - CONTROL ROOM

Misato, Ibuki and Ritsuko looking at the monitors.

RITSUKO: How's the Fifth Chid doing?

IBUKI: His sync is quite high. This is far beyond Asuka's personal best.

MISATO: So, this means he's confirmed as the replacement pilot now?

RITSUKO: Only after we get the results of Unit 02's startup test.


INT. SCHOOL, CLASSROOM (THE NEXT DAY)

Kaworu and Shinji are having fun talking to each other.
Several female students watch from a distance.
{this is so retro shoji it burns, also side note: they're -sama'ing Kaworu in this}

GIRL A: That Ikari's such a leech. He's just hanging all over our dear Kaworu.

GIRL B: They even shared an umbrella home yesterday.

GIRL C: (To Asuka who's next to her) Hey, Soryuu, don't you have suspicions about Kaworu and Ikari?

ASUKA: Well, I mean, they are an item after all.

GIRL A: You mean, they're…… you know?

GIRL B: Huh, I don't believe it.

The rumor spreads through the girls' whispers.
Asuka seems to feel a little bad about it, but just sticks out her tongue and feigns ignorance.


INT. SCHOOL, HALLWAY - AFTER SCHOOL

Kensuke stops Shinji as he's about to head home.

KENSUKE: Shinji.

SHINJI: What?

KENSUKE: I was thinking about throwing Touji a party to celebrate getting out of the hospital, so–

SHINJI: Sorry. I can't today, I have a prior engagement…

KENSUKE: Oh, well that's too bad.

SHINJI: Well, later then… {dick move Shinji!}

As Shinji hurries off, we see Kensuke, watching him leave, looking dejected.


EXT. OLD TOWN (NEAR ODAWARA)

A townscape that was submerged 15 years ago.
Ruins of buildings stick out of the ocean in clusters.
Shinji and Kaworu gaze at the scene from the breakwater.

KAWORU: It's like Bruges in the play, 'Die tote Stadt.' Beautiful and desolate.

SHINJI: What's that?

KAWORU: It's the story of a man who closes himself away in a house in the City of Death, not wanting to forget his young wife who died. The man calls one of the rooms, 'The Temple of Memories,' which he carefully fills with his late wife's belongings to maintain her memory. But, a dancer who looks just like his wife appears and throws his heart into confusion. He learns that life and death are different things, and finally resolves to leave the City of Death.

SHINJI: Huh…

KAWORU: Hey, how about a swim?

SHINJI: A swim? Here?

KAWORU: Yeah.

SHINJI: But I didn't bring a swimsuit.

KAWORU: We can just swim in the nude. No one else is here after all.

SHINJI: But……

KAWORU: There's nothing to be embarrassed about. We're both boys.

SHINJI: Yeah, but…

KAWORU: Let's go.

He says as he heads for the water, stripping off his sailor suit.

Shinji follows after him, unbuttoning his clothes.


EXT. SEA

At a shore between the buildings stands Kaworu, without a shred of clothing on.
Shinji follows a bit later.
Kaworu's supple limbs float to the surface of the sparkling water.
Shinji is unconsciously fascinated by his figure.
Kaworu gradually heads deeper into the water but Shinji stops.

KAWORU: (Turning around) Come over here.

SHINJI: I can't go any further…. I can't swim……

KAWORU: It'll be alright. Just hold on to me.

Shinji enters the deeper water as if drawn to Kaworu.
But, Kaworu doesn't take his hand and Shinji nearly drowns.
Kaworu embraces Shinji.
Shinji clings to him.

KAWORU: Hahaha. You really can't swim, can you?

SHINJI: You're so mean. I trusted you……

Shinji bursts out into tears and buries his face into Kaworu's shoulder, sobbing without hesitation.


INT. ROOM IN AN ABANDONED BUILDING - AFTER SUNSET

The sun has disappeared past the horizon, but the sky is dyed emerald green.
Shinji and Kaworu gaze at it as they dress themselves.

KAWORU: Wow…… An emerald sunset.

SHINJI: It's so beautiful.

As Kaworu buttons the sleeve of his sailor suit, Shinji notices several lines of scars on Kaworu's wrist.

KAWORU: Hey. Why were you crying earlier? Are you scared of the ocean?

SHINJI: I don't know….. I-I don't know. I just thought I'd like to sink into the ocean and die.

KAWORU: Why……?

SHINJI: To tell you the truth, I was avoiding you. Next to you, I'm such a pathetic excuse for a person…… I feel like I'm going to go crazy when I'm with you, but, when I can't see you…… I feel so, so anxious…… And when I thought about how you shouldn't spend your life with someone as pathetic as me…… I just felt like dying……

The sky is dark, their figures are in complete silhouette now.

SHINJI: I can't see your face now……. Kaworu, I……

KAWORU: (Interrupting him) I'm sorry……. I don't feel that way about you.

SHINJI: –––

KAWORU: Let's go home separately. I don't want to hurt you any more.

Kaworu leaves by himself.
Shinji stands there in a sea of despair.


INT. MISATO'S APARTMENT, LIVING ROOM - NIGHT

Asuka is playing on the Famicon with Penpen.
Misato comes out of Shinji's room carrying a tray with cold porridge on it.

ASUKA: Shinji's not eating?

MISATO: Yeah, not one bite. I wonder what's wrong. He doesn't have a fever or anything. I wonder if I need to take him to the hospital for a checkup.

ASUKA: That wouldn't do anything.

MISATO: Why?

ASUKA: You know, it's one of those things, "neither doctors nor a soak in the Kusatsu springs" can solve. {not sure what a good English idiom to this effect would be, the full line is more like "love sickness cannot be cured by doctors or a soak in the Kusatsu springs"}

MISATO: Huh……

ASUKA: I'm sure that idiot is crying into his pillow about being spurned by the object of his affections.

MISATO: Object of his affections…

ASUKA: Yeah, it's the Fifth Child. (Standing up) ––Well, I guess I'll go try to cheer him up.

INT. SHINJI'S ROOM

The door opens and Asuka enters.
Shinji is lying in bed, the cover pulled over his head.

ASUKA: Shinji. I don't know what happened, but you can't lie around like this forever.

Shinji doesn't respond.

ASUKA: (Poking Shinji's cheek) Hey, Shinji, say something. Shin-chan.

SHINJI: (Coldly pushing her hand away) Don't touch me with your filthy hands…

ASUKA: –––

SHINJI: Funny hearing this from you. You're the one who started that disgusting rumor. I don't want to see your face, get out.

Asuka angrily storms out of the room.


INT. NERV HQ, HALLWAY - THE NEXT DAY

Kaworu walking down the hall alone.


INT. THIRD CAGE

Unit 02 is submerged in the red coolant. We hear announcements from the sync test operators.


INT. NERV HQ - CONTROL ROOM

They're preparing for the test.

RITSUKO: Shinji [has a crush] on Kaworu!?

MISATO: For a boy to end up like that over another boy, I made a bit miscalculation.

RITSUKO: So, what of Shinji now?


INT. NERV HQ - SICKBAY

Shinji lies on the bed, hugging a pillow

MISATO: He came to HQ, but he's resting in sickbay. He seems completely dejected.



INT. NERV HQ - BACK IN THE CONTROL ROOM

MISATO: To be honest, I had a bit of a bad feeling when I first met Kaworu. But to think it'd end up like this. I'm really at a loss.

RITSUKO: You're jealous of Kaworu. He stole Shinji from you.

MISATO: What are you saying. I'm his guardian, it's my job to worry about him.

RITSUKO: I know you're not as strong as you look. A lot of things have happened these last few months. I think you might have been able to hold it all together because you've been living with Shinji.

MISATO: ……

OPERATOR A: (To Ritsuko) We're past the time scheduled for the test, but the pilot isn't in the entry plug yet.

RITSUKO: That's strange. I'm sure I gave him the right time….

MISATO: I wonder if he got lost. He's still not used to this place.

An alarm bell sounds suddenly.


INT. NERV HQ CENTRAL COMMAND CENTER

Misato and Ritsuko enter.

MISATO: What happened?

AOBA: A suspicious person has trespassed quite a ways into the underground structure. They're heading for Central Dogma.

HYUGA: We have ID data on the subject. They seem to be using Professor Akagi's card.

RITSUKO: What!?

MISATO: No way……

AOBA: I've got a visual on the target through the cameras in P-block.

An image of the underground facility appears on the main screen.
Kaworu is walking around.

RITSUKO: (Into the microphone) What are you doing there? You're not supposed to be in that place.

On the screen, Kaworu looks a bit troubled.

KAWORU: I'm so sorry……

And that instant video noise fills the screen.

IBUKI: AT Field detected in the underground structure!

MISATO: An Angel!

RITSUKO: That's impossible!


INT. PART OF THE UNDERGROUND STRUCTURE

Kaworu is enveloped by dazzling light.
It converges on him and thus he is transformed into an Angel with a core.
{lol this would have totally been a magical girl henshin}

KAWORU: This is my…… true form……?

At which point a deadly laser shines on Kaworu.
But, his AT Field deflects it.


INT. NERV HQ COMMAND CENTER

MISATO: Regular weapons are useless against an Angel!

RITSUKO: Immediately overwrite Unit 02's personal data with Asuka's!

IBUKI: Yessir!


INT. PART OF THE UNDERGROUND STRUCTURE

Kaworu heads toward Central Dogma.
He's breaking through the AT Field defense wall.


INT. NERV HQ THIRD CAGE

Unit 02's entry plug is being inserted.


INT. UNIT 02 - ENTRY PLUG

ASUKA: See, what did I tell you!


INT. NERV HQ THIRD CAGE

Unit 02 begins startup procedure.

IBUKI'S VOICE: Main power connected. Initiating startup sequence.

OPERATOR A'S VOICE: Startup voltage in 0.5, 0.2… breakthrough.

OPERATOR B's VOICE: Startup system entering phase two.


INT. UNIT 02 - ENTRY PLUG

Asuka prepares for startup, holding the levers.

OPERATOR C'S VOICE: Pilot, connected.

OPERATOR A'S VOICE: Synapses connected, initiating binding.

The plug's inner walls start to deform in various ways, the picture becomes distorted.

ASUKA: ––!?

OPERATOR B'S VOICE: Her pulse is disturbed!


INT. NERV HQ THIRD CAGE

Unit 02's startup sounds are rapidly fading


INT. NERV HQ COMMAND CENTER

IBUKI: The pilot's harmonics aren't within acceptable limits!

MISATO: ……


INT. UNIT 02 - ENTRY PLUG

Asuka's shoulders tremble as she hangs her head.<nr> The light that had shone on her heartlessly goes out.


INT. NERV HQ COMMAND CENTER

The control room rises and Ikari and Fuyutsuki appear.

FUYUTSUKI: So, you allowed an Angel to get into [Central Dogma].

RITSUKO: My apologies. The fault is all mine……

IKARI: This is a massive blunder, Professor Akagi. I am dismissing you from all of your duties at NERV.

For a second, Ritsuko can't believe her ears.

IKARI: Leave immediately. (To everyone) I will be in direct command from hereon, you'll be following my orders. Lieutenant Katsuragi, prepare Unit 01 for standby immediately.

MISATO: Yessir.

IKARI: Commence startup of α Eva.

IBUKI: Roger that.

The central control staff are in a panic.
No one even looks at Ritsuko.

IKARI: What are you doing, Professor Akagi. Only authorized personnel are allowed in this area.

Ritsuko turns around and leaves.


INT. NERV HQ - CAGE

We see α Eva starting up.
A dummy plug being loaded in.



INT. NERV HQ - SICKBAY

Shinji stands dumbfounded holding the phone.

SHINJI: (In barely a whisper) Kaworu is…… An Angel…….!?

MISATO: Hello? Shinji? Can you hear me?

SHINJI: (Screaming) No! You're lying!!!


INT. NERV HQ - CENTRAL DOGMA

Kaworu continues to descend into Terminal Dogma.
There, we find an object that resembles a large, inverted tree.
Before that gate/door, Kaworu senses something.


INT. NERV HQ - SOME ROOM

Kaworu walks in.
The room is full of broken beakers and test tubes.
It's some kind of lab that was wrecked and just left as-is.
On the wall is the symbol of the Human Instrumentality Project, the seven-eyed mark.
A rainbow/rainbows come off the beaker/s as the light hits it/them.

REI: –––Who are you?

Rei comes out from where she was hiding.

KAWORU: Oh it's you…. What are you doing in this place?

REI: This is where I was born and raised.

KAWORU: Hm. I had a feeling when we shook hands, but you really aren't a Lilin are you?

REI: Lilin?

KAWORU: Human that is.

REI: You're an Angel aren't you?

KAWORU: Angel!? (He laughs like it's preposterous) I'm on servant of God.

REI: When did you realize you weren't a Lilin?

KAWORU: I think it was when I turned ten. I came to this city and first understood my fate. This is what I was seeking.

He says, pointing out the seven-eyed mark.

KAWORU: The real thing is somewhere nearby. Would you take me there?

REI: I can't. You'll cause the Third Impact.

KAWORU: (Not quite believing her) You mean I'll cause a horrible disaster just like the Second Impact?

REI: Yes.

At which point we hear a GUOOOOON! GUOOOOON! sound continuously.

KAWORU: An Eva is coming after me.

REI: (Listening to the sound) It's not Unit 01 or Unit 02 though.


INT. NERV HQ - CENTRAL DOGMA

The Angel and Rei leave the room. {from this point on Kaworu is referred to only as 'the Angel' in the stage directions}
α Eva appears from the darkness.
α Eva, upon confirming the presence of an Angel, attacks like a wild beast having spotted its prey.
The Angel runs away, dragging Rei by the hand.
The Angel handily dodges the berserk α Eva.
Almost like Benkei at Gojo bridge.
{http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Benkei}
α Eva crashes into a wall and it crumbles.
Through the thick smoke, the upper body of a seven-eyed giant can be seen nailed to a cross.

REI: Adam……

KAWORU: Adam!?

The Angel and Rei are cornered by some of the rubble.
In an act of utter brutality, α Eva swallows the two of them whole.
Nothing more can be done!
At which point Unit 01 appears.
Unit 01 skewers α Eva on its Prog Knife, and cuts it open.
α Eva dies horrifically.


INT. UNIT 01 - ENTRY PLUG

Shinji confirms Rei on the screen.

SHINJI: Ayanami, are you okay?

REI: Yeah.


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

At some point, the Angel made it to the catwalk overlooking Adam. {how the fuck did Kaworu get here}
The Angel stares at Adam, not moving a muscle.
Ikari's voice comes over the PA system.

IKARI: Angel. Why do you not advance any further?

KAWORU: Commander Ikari, I presume?

IKARI: Indeed.

KAWORU: This is your 'Temple of Memories' isn't it?


INT. PA SYSTEM LOCATION {?}

IKARI: Why do you make no attempt to make contact with Adam? Could it be that you pity humanity?

KAWORU: I'm the one who deserves your sympathy. Because continuing to live is so difficult.

IKARI: You chose death?


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

KAWORU: Death is the single act of free will I have. The only way to defy my maker.

IKARI: But that's contrary to the basic principle of life.

KAWORU: Angels are creatures that constantly evolve. We have no predetermined form. And death is but another part of life.

We hear Shinji's voice coming from Unit 01.

SHINJI: Kaworu……

KAWORU: Shinji. I knew it would come to this, so I'm glad we had a chance to swim in the ocean together.


INT. UNIT 01 - ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: You deceived me? You used me?

KAWORU: That's not quite right. I had so much fun spending those days with you. You're the only one who can end my life. If it's by your hand, nothing could bring me greater joy, even death.

SHINJI: (Sobbing) How am I supposed to be able to do that!


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

KAWORU: Hurry. I can feel something stirring inside me. I think it's my instinct. Right now, I feel like you did before, I don't even know myself. {er, he's mirroring Shinji's line about not knowing why he's crying}


INT. UNIT 01 - ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: ……

KAWORU: Hurry!


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Kaworu suddenly turn around and jumps, diving toward Adam.

REI: Ikari!


INT. UNIT 01 - ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: –––!


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Unit 01 reaches out and grabs the Angel just before it makes contact with Adam.


Crunch.


With that sound, we see a faint grimace on Rei's face.


Blood flows from Unit 01's hand, trickling down.


Finally, Shinji's screams fill the huge room.

(FADE OUT)


INT. CAGE - SOME TIME HAS PASSED

Unit 01 in the coolant.
Shinji is in a corner washing his hands at a sink.
Misato comes over.

MISATO: Shinji…

SHINJI: (Without turning around) The scent of his blood is gone. But, I can still feel it in my hands……

MISATO: Shinji, you admired him didn't you?

SHINJI: He had everything I didn't. He should have survived.

MISATO: That's not true. Only those who desire to live survive.

Shinji doesn't say a word and intently washes his hands.


INT. LOCKER ROOM

Asuka stands there alone.
The door of the locker in front of her is covered in dents like someone punched it over and over.

ASUKA: –––


INT. HALL

We hear the clanging of Asuka beating on her locker from the locker room.
Rei leans against the wall, as if dizzy.
She eventually ends up lying on the ground.


INT. RITSUKO'S LAB

Ritsuko, alone, thinking about something intently.
Several MPs enter the room without knocking.

MAN A: (Holding out a warrant) Akagi Ritsuko. You are under arrest. I'm sure you know all too well what the charges are, Professor, would you care to hear them?

RITSUKO: No, no need. It'd just be a waste of time.

Ritsuko is taken away.


INT. SOMEWHERE - HUMAN INSTRUMENTALITY PROJECT

The committee is gathered.

KEEL: We have just confirmed the elimination of the final Angel as predicted in the scenario. Now there are no barriers to the Human Instrumentality Project.

MEMBER A: But we have a new problem. Ikari Gendou and Unit 01.

MEMBER B: Nerv is of no use to us now.

MEMBER C: He's been using his position as commander to turn Nerv into his personal property.

MEMBER D: Our investigation up until now makes it painfully clear that Ikari has been plotting to turn Unit 01 into a "god" and keep it to himself.

KEEL: As head of SEELE, I think we should dissolve Nerv.



INT. NERV HQ - MAIN COMMAND CENTER

Fuyutsuki and Ikari plotting something.

(FADE OUT)

Original Japanese

新世紀エヴァンゲリオン 第24話「最後のシ者」(第1稿)

○(F・I)ネルフ本部・ケイジ


一角に、全長5mほどの人型兵器が冷却液に侵かっている。
ボディーには『αーTYPEーEVA000』のマーキング。
その前のアンビリカル・ブリッジに立つ碇ゲンドウと冬月コウゾウ。


碇: 「エヴァの新たな試作品、αーエヴァだ」

冬月: 「小型化したエヴァンゲリオンか。今になって、何故このようなものが必要なんだ」

碇: 「人類補完計画のために作られたものだ。これはそのテストタイプさ」

冬月: 「現場への根回しも少しは必要ではなかったのか。零号機復旧作業の凍結についても疑問に思っている人間も多い。赤木博士は独自のルートでエヴァのパイロットを探しているぞ」

碇: 「彼女にはもう少し、頑張ってもらう。E計画は終わっていない。ゼーレのシナリオでは、まだ最後の使徒が残っている」


「 最 後 の シ 者 」


○ネルフ本部・テストプラグ実験場・制御室


グラフの数値を見つめているミサトと伊吹。


ミサト: 「——どう? 」

伊吹: 「駄目ですね。二人とも過去最低の数値です」


テストプラグのアスカ、レイがモニターに映っている。


ミサト: 「何か原因が考えられるの?」

伊吹: 「まだ明確な回答を得られませんが、二人のシンクロ率低下にはデーター的に相違がみられます。おそらくアスカは精神的要因、レイは肉体的要因によるものです」

ミサト: 「二人がこのままエヴァに乗るには無理があるわね。肝心のパイロットがこれではしょうがないわ。この数週間、リツコが代替パイロットのスカウトに奔走していたわけか」

伊吹: 「今度の適任者はマルドゥック機関の報告書に依らない、初めてのパイロットだそうですね。私、ちょっと心配なんです。今回のことに関しては、赤城博士の勇み足のような気がして仕方がないんです。お気づきになりません? 先輩は最近、焦ってるって」

ミサト: 「・・・・・・」


○第3新東京市郊外・駅前のロータリー(午後)


一台の車が止まっていて、リツコとシンジが列車の到着を待っている。
リツコ、くわえた煙草に火をつけようとするが、折からの風でうまくいかない。
シンジの掌が自然に伸び、風を避ける。


リツコ: 「ありがとう。(と煙草を吸い)シンジ君って、いつも誰かに気を使っているのね。家に帰っても気の休まる暇、ないんじゃない?」

シンジ: 「そんなことないですよ。それに、最近は3人が揃うこと、少ないですから。ミサトさんはずっと忙しいし、アスカはテストの居残りで、夜遅くまで帰らないし」

リツコ: 「家庭崩壊の種を蒔いているのは、どうやら私のようね」

シンジ: 「しょうがないですよ。仕事なんだから。ただ、ちょっと気になるんです。ミサトさんのお酒の量が増えたみたいで」

リツコ: 「——シンジ君は誰かに恋したこと、ある?」

シンジ: 「まだないですよ・・・・・・」

リツコ: 「ミサトの心の中では、加持君は身体の一部になっていたの。彼がいなくなってから、ミサトは初めてそれに気づいたのね。でも時に切ない気持ちがあふれ出して、どうしようもない事があるわ。そんな夜はチョッピリお酒の力を借りるわけ」


駅のホームに特別列車が滑り込んでくる。


シンジ: 「人を好きになれば、そうゆうことがわかるようになるんですか」

リツコ: 「わかる大人になることね。——さ。フィフスチルドレンのお出ましよ」


停車していた特別列車が発車する。
ホームに可愛らしい紺色の水兵服を着た一人の少年が残される。(渚カヲル)
陽炎の中に立つカヲル。
蜜色の豊かな髪が西日の逆光を受け、キラキラ輝いている。
その神々しい美しさに思わず見とれてしまうシンジ。
カヲルと視線が合うシンジ。どきっ、とする。


○ジオフロント・天井ビルのロビー


エヴァの3パイロットとカヲルとの対面が行われている。
カヲルの横にはミサトとリツコ。


リツコ: 「私達が選んだ5人目の適任者・渚カヲル君よ」

カヲル: 「渚カヲルです。よろしく」

アスカ: 「(目を輝かせ)私、アスカ。惣流・アスカ・ラングレー。よろしくねッ ❤」


と握手する。


リツコ: 「こっちがファースト・チルドレンの綾波レイ」

カヲル: 「よろしく」

レイ: 「(相変わらず無表情で)こちらこそ」


握手を交わした二人、ほんの一瞬、見つめ合う。
ミサトは暗く沈んだ様子のシンジを見ている。


○ネルフ本部・写真室


正面を向くカヲルに、パッとフラッシュの閃光。


○同・別室


プリンターからカヲルのIDカードが出てくる。


ミサト: 「(それを取り上げ)渚カヲル・・・なかなかの美形じゃない」

リツコ: 「可愛いだけじゃないわ。向こうでも成績優秀、スポーツ万能の神童で評判だったそうよ」

ミサト: 「シンジ君が彼にコンプレックスを持たなければいいのだけど。アイツ、すぐイジけちゃうから。今日もちょっとそんな感じあったし」

リツコ: 「(ミサトを横目で見て)過保護ね・・・・・・」


○中央病院・全景

ケンスケの声:「ちわーッす」

トウジの声: 「おう、ケンスケやないか。見舞いに来てくれたんか」


○同・病室

ベッドの上のトウジと、見舞いに来たケンスケ。

ケンスケ: 「受付で聞いたけど、明日にも退院だって?」

トウジ: 「ああ。来週から行けると思うわ」

ケンスケ: 「治ったら、またエヴァに乗るのか?」

トウジ: 「いや、勘弁してもらうことにした。大して引き留められへんかったところを見ると、あんまし期待されてへんかったみたいやな。わははは。(と寂しげに笑う)」

ケンスケ: 「そうか・・・・・・」

トウジ: 「ところで、学校の方はどないや」

ケンスケ: 「ま、相変わらずと言えば相変わらずだな。そういや最近、転校生が来たよ」


○ケンスケのビデオ録画

学校の教室で、黒板に自分の名前を書いているカヲル。

ケンスケの声: 「名前は渚カヲル。こうゆうのを美少年って言うんだろうな」

トウジの声: 「ワシには負けるけどな」

書き終わり、正面を向くカヲル。

ケンスケの声: 「見てみろよ。女たちのリアクション」

 色めき立つ女子たちの様子。

トウジの声: 「メスどもが、色づきよって」

 休み時間。中庭で女の子たちと談笑しているカヲル。


ケンスケの声: 「転校して来た早々、ファンクラブが結成される始末さ。校内の女子全員が入会したんじゃないのかな。ごく一部を除いてね」

 我関せず、頬杖をついているレイ。


トウジの声: 「ま、コイツはこうやろ」

 パンすると、しょんぼりした様子のアスカ。


トウジの声: 「惣流、元気ないやないか。一番騒ぎそうな奴なのに」

ケンスケの声: 「朝にはみんなの先頭になって騒いでいたけど、今、転校して来るってことは、エヴァのパイロットになるってことだろ。惣流にとってはライバルの出現ってわけだよ。アイツ、最近、弐号機とのシンクロ、うまく行ってないようだから」

 アスカ、フォーカスされているのに気づき、カメラに物を投げつける。
 以下、サンドノイズ。

 


○もとの病室

携帯ビデオのモニターを収めるケンスケ。

ケンスケ: 「今度の転校生、早3日でクラスの貴公子と言ったところさ」

トウジ: 「貴公子や何や知らんけど、いけすかんやっちゃな」

ケンスケ: 「鈴原は新入りが来るときまってそうだな。だいたい転校生ってのはいけすかないもんなんだよ。シンジの時もそうだったじゃないか」

トウジ: 「シンジの奴はどないしてんねん」


○第壱中学校・2-A教室(放課後)

シンジ、席に座り、机の上の両腕に顔を伏せている。
シンジの他には誰もいない。
どこからかピアノの音が聞こえてくる。
カバンを取りに来たヒカリが入って来る。


ヒカリ: 「あれ。碇君、いたの」

シンジ: 「(顔を上げ)うん・・・・・・」

ヒカリ: 「相田君と一緒に鈴原のお見舞いに行ったんだと思ってた」

シンジ: 「ちょっと・・・・・・ね」

ヒカリ: 「(ピアノの音色に気づき)渚君が弾いているんだ。彼、上手ね。———じゃ、お先に」

シンジ: 「さよなら」


 再び一人のシンジ、もの憂げな様子でピアノの音色を聴いている。



○シンジの記憶——駅

視線の合ったカヲル、フッとほほ笑む。

カヲル: 「よろしく」

シンジ: 「(吃ってしまい)こ、こちらこそ」

 頬を染め、俯いてしまうシンジ。


○第壱中学校・音楽室

ピアノの鍵盤を叩いているカヲル。  


○同・2-A教室

ピアノの曲が、何か不自然な終わり方をする。

シンジ: 「・・・・・・」


○同・音楽室

恐る恐るドアを開けるシンジ。
——中には誰もいない。
階段の方から去っていく足音が聞こえて来る。



○同・階段

駆け降りるシンジ。
だが足音には追いつかない。
その時、校内スピーカーからヴィヴァルディの『四季』・”冬”の弦楽のユニゾンが流れる。

アナウンス: 『下校の時刻になりました。学校に残っている生徒は、直ちに下校準備をしてください』


○同・校庭(夕方)

響き渡る下校放送。
次々に練習を終える運動部の生徒たち。 校舎から出て来たシンジ、見回すが、カヲルの姿はない。
用具を片付けていた運動部員たち、一斉に空を仰ぐ。
——雨だ
太陽が照っているにもかかわらず、大粒の雨が降り出す。
生徒たち、急いで校舎内に駆け込む。
黄金色の雨に包まれるシンジ。


○帰り道

お天気雨の中、一人、傘をさして帰るカヲル。
誰かが後ろから駆けて来て、追い抜いて行く。
それはずぶ濡れになったシンジである。
シンジ、カヲルに気づいて、立ち止まる。
カヲル、傘を少し持ち上げ、ニコッと笑う。


シンジ: 「——」

 カヲル、もう一度、傘を持ち上げる。
 シンジ、少しためらうが、カヲルの傘の下に入る。


カヲル: 「これからネルフに行くの?」

シンジ: 「うん・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「じゃ、一緒に行こう」

 二人、歩きだす。


  ○レイの部屋

濡れた体を拭いていたレイ、ふと気づいて、窓の外を見やる。
第3新東京市に鮮やかな虹の橋が架かっている。


レイ: 「・・・・・・」



○ネルフ本部・第3試験場

アスカが入って来て、弐号機のタラップを上がろうとする。


アスカ: 「さてと、今日も私の弐号機はナイス・コンディションかな」

リツコの声: 『(アナウンス)ちょっと、まって。悪いけど、アスカは後にして』

アスカ: 「後って・・・・・・」

リツコの声: 『弐号機にはフィフスチルドレンが入るから』

 上の踊り場にはプラグスーツを着たシンジとカヲルの姿が見える。

カヲル: 「僕、シンジ君に嫌われているのかと思っていた」

シンジ: 「どうして・・・・・・?」

カヲル: 「何だか、僕を避けてたみたいだから」

シンジ: 「そんなことないよ」

カヲル: 「ホントに?」

シンジ: 「ホントだよ・・・・・・」

 シンジとカヲルのクスクス笑いが聞こえてくる。

アスカ: 「・・・・・・」


○同・制御室

モニターを見ているミサト、リツコ、伊吹。


リツコ: 「フィフスチルドレンの調子はどう?」

伊吹: 「高いシンクロ率を示しています。これはアスカの自己ベストをも遥かに凌いでいます」

ミサト: 「じゃあ、今のままでは代替パイロットは彼で決まりということ?」

リツコ: 「弐号機の起動試験の結果次第では、そうゆうことになるわね」



  ○第壱中学校・教室(翌日)

楽しげにおしゃべりしている様子のシンジとカヲル。
それを遠巻きに見ている数人の女子生徒たち。


女子生徒A: 「碇君たら、腰ぎんちゃくみたい。カヲル様に纏わりついちゃってさ」

女子生徒B: 「昨日も相合い傘で帰ってたわよ」

女子生徒C: 「(側にいたアスカに)ねえ、惣流。カヲル様と碇君、怪しくない?」

アスカ: 「だって、あの二人、デキてるんだもの」

女子生徒A: 「それって、あの二人が・・・・・・ってコト?」

女子生徒B: 「えーッ、信じられない」


撒いた噂が女子生徒たちのヒソヒソ話に乗って、伝えられていく。
アスカ、少し後悔した様子を見せるが、ペロッと舌を出し、しらんぷりする。


○同・廊下(放課後)

帰ろうとするシンジを呼び止めるケンスケ。

ケンスケ: 「シンジ」

シンジ: 「何?」

ケンスケ: 「うちでトウジの退院祝いのパーティやろうかと思ってるんだけど」

シンジ: 「ごめん。今日はちょっと、先約があるんだ・・・・・・」

ケンスケ: 「そうか、そりゃ残念」

シンジ: 「じゃ、また・・・・・・」

 そそくさと去って行くシンジの後ろ姿を寂しげに見送るケンスケ。

 


○旧市街(小田原あたり)

15年前に水没した街並み。
海の中から突き出したビルの廃墟が林立している。
防波堤の上からそれを眺めているシンジとカヲル。


カヲル: 「『死の都』の舞台・ブリュージュのようだ。美しくて、寂しくて」

シンジ: 「何なの、それは」

カヲル: 「若くして死んだ奥さんを忘れられずに、死の都の家に閉じこもってしまったという男の物語だよ。男は部屋の一つを『ありし人の教会』と呼んで、思い出がつまった亡き妻の持ち物を大切に保管している。だが、妻と瓜二つの踊り子が現れ、心をかき乱された男は、生と死が別のものであることを悟り、最後は死の都から出て行く決心をするという話さ」

シンジ: 「ふうん・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「ねえ、泳がない?」

シンジ: 「泳ぐって、ここで?」

カヲル: 「うん」

シンジ: 「水着、持って着てないよ」

カヲル: 「裸で泳げばいいさ。他に誰もいないのだから」

シンジ: 「でも・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「何を恥ずかしがってるの。男同士だろ」

シンジ: 「そうだけど・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「行こうよ」


と水兵服を脱ぎながら、水辺へと進んでいく。

シンジも後について行きながら、服のボタンを外す。


 

○海

ビルの谷間の浅瀬を、一糸纏わぬ姿で入っていくカヲル。
少し遅れてシンジ。
水面のきらめきの中にカヲルのなよやかな肢体が浮かび上がる。
その姿に思わず見とれてしまうシンジ。
カヲルはどんどん沖へと進んでいくが、シンジはついて行けずに、立ち止まってしまう。


カヲル: 「(振り返り)こっちへおいでよ」

シンジ: 「ここから先はダメだよ・・・・・・。僕、泳げないんだ・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「大丈夫。僕につかまればいい」

 カヲルに吸い寄せられるようにして、シンジは深みへと入る。
 だが、カヲルは手を引っ込めてしまい、シンジは溺れそうになる。
 シンジを抱き寄せるカヲル。
 しがみつくシンジ。

カヲル: 「ははは、本当に泳げないんだね」

シンジ: 「意地悪。信じていたのに・・・・・・」

 不意に涙を流すと、シンジはカヲルの肩に顔を埋め、訳もなく嗚咽する。

 


○ビルの廃墟・一室(日没後)

水平線に消えた夕日が、空を緑色に染めている。
服を着ながら、それを眺めているシンジとカヲル。


カヲル: 「すごい・・・・・・緑色の夕焼けだ」

シンジ: 「きれいだね」

 シンジ、水兵服の腕のボタンをはめるカヲルの手首に幾筋もの傷が入っているのに気づく。

カヲル: 「ねえ、さっきは、何で泣いたりしたの? 海が怖かったの?」

シンジ: 「わからない・・・・・・。僕、自分で自分がわからないんだ。あの海に沈んで、死んでしまいたいって思った」

カヲル: 「どうして・・・・・・?」

シンジ: 「確かに僕は君を避けていた。カヲル君に比べると、僕なんてみじめでつまらない人間なんだろう・・・・・・君のそばにいると気が狂ってしまいそうで、そのくせ姿が見えないときには・・・・・・不安で不安で・・・・・・。そうゆういじましい自分と一生つきあっていかなきゃならないと思うと・・・・・・僕はもう、死んでしまいたい・・・・・・」

 空はすっかり翳り、二人の姿は完全なシルエットになる。

シンジ: 「もう、顔も見えなくなっちゃった・・・・・・。カヲル君、僕は君のことが・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「(遮り)ごめん・・・・・・そうゆうのイヤなんだ」

シンジ: 「——」

カヲル: 「別々に帰ろ。これ以上、傷つけたくないから」

 一人,去って行くカヲル。
 シンジ、絶望の淵に立たされる。



○ネルフ本部・中央作戦司令室・発令所

入ってくるミサト、リツコ。


ミサト: 「何があったの?」

青葉: 「不審者が大深度地下施設に侵入。セントラルドクマに向かっています」

日向: 「IDのデータが入りました。赤木博士のものが使われています」

リツコ: 「何ですって!?」

ミサト: 「まさか・・・・・・」

青葉: 「Pブロックの監視カメラが目標の可視映像をとらえます」

 主スクリーンが大深度地下施設の画像を映す。
 歩いているのはカヲルである。

リツコ: 「(マイクに)どうしてそこにいるの。あなたはそこに入って行けないはずでしょ」

 画面のカヲル、少し困ったような顔をする。

カヲル: 『ごめんなさい・・・・・・』

 といった瞬間、パッと画面にノイズが走る。

伊吹: 「大深度地下施設にATフィールド確認!」

ミサト: 「使徒!」

リツコ: 「そんな馬鹿な!」


○同・大深度地下施設の一角

目も眩まんばかりの光に包まれているカヲル。
それが収束すると,彼はコアを持った使徒に変容している。


カヲル: 「これが僕の・・・・・・本当の姿・・・・・・?」

 その時、突然、カヲルに向かって殺人レーザーが照射される。
 だが、ATフィールドがそれを跳ね返してしまう。


○同・発令所

ミサ: 「使徒に対して、通常兵器は何の役にも立たないわ」

リツコ: 「弐号機のパーソナルデータを至急、アスカに書き換えて!」

伊吹: 「はい!」


  ○同・大深度地下施設の一角

セントラルドグマへ進んでいくカヲル。
ATフィールド防御壁を突き破って行く。


  ○同・第3ケイジ

弐号機にエントリープラグが挿入されていく。


○弐号機・エントリープラグ

アスカ: 「だーから、言わないこっちゃないんだから」


○ネルフ本部・第3ケイジ

起動準備に入る弐号機。

伊吹の声: 『主電源接続完了。起動用システム作業開始』

オペAの声: 『稼動電圧まであと0.5、0.2・・・突破』

オペBの声: 『起動システム、第2段階へ移行』


 

○弐号機・エントリープラグ

レバーを持って、起動に備えているアスカ。


オペCの声: 『パイロット、接合に入ります』

オペAの声: 『シナプス挿入、結合開始』

 プラグの内壁が様々に変容していくが、その画像が乱れる。

アスカ: 「——!?」

オペBの声: 『パルスが乱れています!』


 

○ネルフ本部・第3ケイジ

弐号機の起動音が急速に落ちていく。


 

○同・発令所


伊吹: 「パイロットのハーモニクスが許容値にまで達してません!」

ミサト: 「・・・・・・」


  ○弐号機・エントリープラグ

肩を震わせて俯いているアスカ。
彼女を照らしていた明かりが、無情にも消えていく。


○ネルフ本部・発令所

司令室がせりあがり、碇と冬月が姿を現す。    冬月: 「使徒の侵入を許したのだな」

リツコ: 「申し訳ありません。責任は全て私に・・・・・・」

: 「大失態だな、赤城博士。ネルフにおける全ての職務から君を解任する」

 一瞬、我が耳を疑うリツコ。

: 「直ちにここから出て行きたまえ。(一同に)これより私が直接、指揮を取る。葛城3佐。初号機のパイロットを至急、スタンバイさせろ」

ミサト:「はい」

: 「αーエヴァを起動開始」

伊吹: 「了解」

 慌しく動き出す中央作戦司令室のスタッフたち。
 誰もリツコの方を見ようとしない。

: 「何をしている赤木博士。ここは関係者以外、立ち入り禁止のはずだ」

 リツコ、踵を返して、去って行く。


○同・ケイジ

起動するαーエヴァの描写。
搭載されるダミープラグ。


 

○同・医務室

内線の受話器を持ち、呆然とした様子のシンジ。


シンジ: 「(声にはならない声で)カヲル君が・・・・・・使徒・・・・・・!?」

ミサトの声: 『もしもし、シンジ君、聞こえる?』

シンジ: 「(絶叫)嘘だッ! そんなの嘘だ!!」


○ネルフ本部・セントラルドグマ

を下降していくカヲル。
そこはまるで、巨大なさかさまの木のような形をしている。
カヲル、とある扉の前で何かの気配を感じる。


○同・一室

カヲルが入って来る。
割れた試験管やビーカーの散乱する室内。
すでに破壊され、放置されたままの施設である。
壁には人類補完委員会のシンボル、7つ目のマーク。
ビーカーに当たった光が虹を生む。


レイ: 「——誰?」

 物陰から姿を現したのはレイである。

カヲル: 「君か・・・・・・。どうしてこんな所に?」

レイ: 「ここは私の生まれ育った場所だもの」

カヲル: 「ふうん。握手した時から思っていたけど。君はリリンではないって」

レイ: 「リリン?」

カヲル: 「人間のことさ」

レイ: 「あなたは使徒だったのね」

カヲル: 「使徒!?(おかしそうに笑い)僕は神様の使いなんかじゃないよ」

レイ: 「あなた自身がリリンじゃないと気づいたのはいつ?」

カヲル: 「十になった時からかな。この街にやってきて、初めて自分の宿命というものがわかった。僕が求めているのはコレだったんだ」

、7つ目のシンボルマークを指す。

カヲル: 「実物は、この近くにあるよね。案内してほしいな」

レイ: 「それは駄目。サードインパクトが起こってしまう」

カヲル: 「(些か信じられず)あのセカンドインパクトのような大惨事が起こるの?」

レイ: 「そうよ」

 その時、グォオオン! グォオオン! と大音響が連続する。

カヲル: 「エヴァが追ってきた」

レイ: 「(その音を聞いて)初号機でも弐号機でもないわ」


○同・セントラルドグマ

一室から出てくる使徒とレイ。
暗闇の奥からαーエヴァが現れる。
αーエヴァ、使徒を確認すると、獲物を見つけた猛獣のように襲いかかる。
使徒、レイの手を引いて、逃げる。
猪突猛進のαーエヴァ、かろやかにそれをかわす使徒。
まるで五条橋の義経と弁慶だ。
αーエヴァが激突した壁が崩れ落ちる。
濛々たる煙の向こう側に十字架にかけられた7つ目の巨大の上半身が見える。


レイ: 「アダム・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「アダム!?」

 その隙を衝かれて、使徒とレイは袋小路に追い詰められてしまう。
 凶暴さを丸だしにして二人諸共喰いつこうとするαーエヴァ。
 万事休す!
 その時、シューターに乗って、初号機が現れる。
 初号機、プログナイフでαーエヴァを串刺しにし、支柱に突き立てる。
 悲惨なαーエヴァの断末魔。


○初号機・エントリープラグ

スクリーンに映るレイを確認するシンジ。


シンジ: 「綾波、無事?」

レイ: 『ええ』


○セントラルドグマ

いつのまにか使徒はアダムを見下ろす手摺りのところまで来ている。
使徒、アダムを見つめたまま、動かない。
スピーカーから碇の声が聞こえて来る。

: 『使徒よ。何故それ以上、進もうとしない』

カヲル: 「碇司令ですね」

: 『そうだ』

カヲル: 「ここはあなたにとっての『ありし人の教会』なんですね」


○発令所


: 「何故、君はアダムに触れようとはしない。人類に対する同情、哀れみかね」

カヲル: 『いたわりですよ。僕自身に対するね。生き続けることは、つらいことだから』

: 「死を選ぶのか?」


  ○セントラルドグマ

カヲル: 「死は僕に与えられた、唯一の自由意志。造物主の命に逆らえる、唯一の手段なんですよ」

: 『それが生命の原則に反していてもか』

カヲル: 「生命とは絶えず変化していくものです、形を定めるものではありません。死もまた生の一部に外ならないから」

 初号機からシンジの声が聞こえて来る。

シンジ: 『カヲル君・・・・・・』

カヲル: 「シンジ君。こんな結末になるとわかってたのなら、あの時、一緒に海に沈めばよかった」


○初号機・エントリープラグ

シンジ: 「君は僕を騙していたの? 利用しただけなの?」

カヲル: 『それは違うよ。君と過ごした数日間、とても楽しかった。僕の命を絶つことができるのは君だけだ。君の手にかかって、死ぬなら、こんな幸福なことはない』

シンジ: 「(泣きじゃくり)そんなことできるわけないじゃないか!」


○セントラルドグマ

カヲル: 「早く。体の中で、何かが僕を突き動かそうとしているのがわかるんだ。それは僕の本能なんだと思う。今の僕は、あの時の君のように、自分で自分がわからないんだ」


 

○初号機・エントリープラグ

シンジ: 「・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「早く!」


○セントラルドグマ

カヲル、いきなり身を翻したかと思うと、パッと跳躍し、アダムに向かってダイビングしていく。

レイ: 「碇君!」


○初号機・エントリープラグ

シンジ: 「——!」


○セントラルドグマ

初号機の腕が伸びて、アダムに接触する寸前にガッと使徒を掴む。
ぶちゅ。
という音とともに僅かに顔をしかめるレイ。
初号機の掌の中から血が溢れ、滴り落ちている。
やがて、シンジの絶叫が巨大な空間に響き渡る。


(Fade Out)  


○ケイジ(時間経過)

冷却液に浸かっている初号機。
流しがある一角で放心したように手を洗っているシンジ。
ミサトが来る。

ミサト: 「シンジ君・・・・・・」

シンジ: 「(振り向きもせず)血の臭いが取れないんだ。それに、潰した時の感触も・・・・・・」

ミサト: 「シンジ君は、彼にあこがれていたのね」

シンジ: 「彼は、ぼくにないものをみんな持ってた。生き残るなら彼の方だ」

ミサト: 「それは違うわ。生き残るのは、生きたいという意志をもつものだけよ」

 シンジ、無言のまま、ひたすら手を洗っている。


○更衣室

一人、佇んでいるアスカ。
何度も殴りつけたのか、目の前のロッカーの蓋はボコボコにへこんでいる。


アスカ: 「——」


○通路

更衣室からガンガンと、アスカがロッカーを叩く音が聞こえてくる。
目眩をおこしたのか、つらそうな様子で壁に凭れているレイ。
ついには床に伏せてしまう。


○リツコの研究室

一人、じっと何かを考えている様子のリツコ。
ノックもなしに数人の警務部の男が入ってくる。

男A: 「(令状を出し)赤木リツコ。君を逮捕する。容疑の詳細は博士自身が一番ご存知のはずだが、読み上げましょうか?」

リツコ: 「いえ、結構よ。時間の無駄でしょ」

 リツコ、連行されて行く。


 

○どこか(人類補完委員会)

委員会のメンバーが集まっている。

キール: 「たった今、シナリオに記されていた最後の使徒の殲滅が確認された。これにより人類補完計画に対する障害はなくなったのだ」

委員A: 「だが、新たなる問題が浮上しつつある。碇ゲンドウと初号機だ」

委員B: 「ネルフも今となっては無用の長物」

委員C: 「奴は総司令の地位を利用してネルフを私物化した」

委員D: 「碇が初号着を”神”にしてそれを占有しようとたくらんでいることは、これまでの調査によっても明らかだ」

キール: 「私はゼーレの首長として、ここでネルフの解体を決議したいと思う」


○ネルフ本部・総司令公務室

何事か密議している碇と冬月


(Fade Out)

References

  1. "脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa
  2. "In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script. The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.
    Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa
  3. Anno: That’s right, that’s right. There was a scene in a music room after an evacuation, when no one was there. Interviewer: What is the connection between Kaworu-kun and this image of music? Anno: I don’t think it was words. It was as communication, when he’d first come. Interviewer: Shinji also played the cello, and played music once, didn’t he? Or else, was that a variety of therapy, or something? Anno: No, I don’t know. That was the scriptwriters’ idea. Well, it was just that the character gave off the feeling of a cello. Interviewer: Did that first script do anything like take on that sort of form? Anno: It didn’t. It just went as far as the scenario.
  4. Anno: As might be expected, this was what you’d call above my tolerance level. [...] Anno: Around the time when you’re a middle school student, you often go with friends to public bath-houses and stuff, right? On the way home from school and so forth. Also, going there right after you go play at the beach, just as you are. There are more public baths in the boonies, you see. So it almost feels like a watering hole for men. Well, people don’t go washing each other’s backs or any skinship things like that. In any case, it’s a sort of place that you can all go to together, play there, and head home.
  5. Interviewer: Speaking about the blushing, is it because Shinji was happy that someone said they like him? Anno: Yes, Shinji kun really didn’t experience carnal desire there.
  6. The conclusion is that it probably was Akio Satsukawa. Nagisa can also be read as Messenger, perhaps he came up with the name when he was writing the script. We all think it fits Akio’s taste. What struck me most was how Akio expanded the world, he made Kaworu a JUNE character……Or I should say a male/male tanbi(“aesthetic”) romances character that went berserk. [...] Interviewer: Is this what they called the dreamy first script? Yes, Yes. In the end, Anno changed it to the bath scene. Anno took Akio’s idea into a very unique perspective, which end with this Kaworu who give you a decadent feeling, in my option. There is one thing that doesn’t need to cover up: they wrote EVA’s script as long as possible. In other words, the script they gave Anno had two Eps length, then Anno modified it into a story. So I think he probably cut off a lot of Kaworu’s story. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto
  7. I: But it caused female audiences in front of their televisions to shriek with joy. M: We never thought it will turn out like that. T: Was it not planned? M: We really only realised it afterwards and never thought of much at that time, after all we were going berserk. - Shizo/Parano interview "judging Hideaki Anno in his absence"
  8. M: That interview in which he pushes all responsibility to Satsukawa is interesting. But when we came up with the original idea, did it start out as such? H: eh? M: Not that level of homo, did Satsukawa up it? H: His descriptions are def top-notch. [Indicating, he is a good writer] M: In JUNE it shows that the scripts originally had skinny dipping, musical duets and stuff (laughs) A: Skinny dipping?! M: Yeah, completely naked. I didn’t want to draw that, like to a “If thats how it is I’ll quit” extent. A: Isn’t that basically porn? M: So when I stated we must change it, it became Anno’s expert bathing. A: His favourite public baths. H: Why hand-holding though? M: Because thats what the script said. H: (flips to the relevant page of the script) it says “touched his hand”. Isn’t it touched, but you drew “hold” (laughs). M: Because thats what the artist drew and I wasn’t really too concerned and ok-ed it. (laughs) there was basically no time. - NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4
  9. He wasn’t the last Angel from the baginning. At first, the information they gave me only said that Kaworu was a humanoid Angel who appeared at the finale stage of the Anime. But at that time, I had already worked out something similar—since the gradually appeared Angel all had different shapes and characteristics, they should become more closer to human. Then there also came with the subtitle “Cat and Transfer Student” when they were planing it. If I have to figure out Anno’s intention, I think he may awared the “Monster Messenger and Boy” (Ep.33) in The Return of Ultraman. It is where a monster named Muruchi appeared. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto
  10. Anno: "[...] In the initial stages, he was a pretty boy who carried around a cat. The very first plot title was “The cat and the transfer student.” It was a story about transfer student carrying a cat coming to the school and so forth. As we went on with it, in episode 24, it had already moved away from the school, so. It would have still have been good if it had come between episodes 11 and 16, though."
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  12. Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection