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The second early draft of Episode 24 printed in the magazine JUNE Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm. According to that source, the drafts were credited to Akio Satsukawa (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with Anno in nine other episodes, including Episode 6, Episode 9, Episode 15 and Episode 21. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then he reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.[1][2] These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified. As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected them.

There are several scenes and plot elements that were removed or moved to other episodes, indicating how early in conceptualizing the story Anno and staff were when these drafts were written. For instance, Shinji playing the cello was Satsukawa's idea according to Anno[3], but Anno had this removed from this episode and he instead moved it to Episode 15, another Satsukawa episode, using it to make Asuka kiss Shinji. Anno also goes at length about how he changed the scene to a public bath specifically because it was a casual occurrence, specially in the countryside that he is from.[4][5] Anno also mentions he fixed up the later script in a more final form. This script is available in Evangelion Original III, it is the first one that includes Anno in the credits, and is very similar to the version aired in Episode 24, with a few plot-related differences. That is in fact the one considered as the "original script" in production notes. It was followed by the storyboards, a refined script sent to the seiyuu, and the final one published on the DVDs. Some other interviews also indicate Kaworu's change from his more neutral earlier self as a little boy with a pet cat was mostly Satsukawa's idea[6], much like the execution of the episode was rushed and reception to it came largely as a surprise to staff, who were unaware of what the episode might be interpreted as.[7][8] It's also worth taking into account that Kaworu is apparently the only character not to be named by Anno himself, but by Satsukawa, so it seems he had a lot more input in modifying this character early on and these drafts stand as an example of that, even though most of his ideas didn't make past Anno's approval.[9][10]

Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of Lilith in Terminal Dogma in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.[11] This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. Yamashita, for instance, wanted Asuka to become a werewolf. In Evangelion 2.0, Enokido wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.[12]

See also: Resources:Episode 24 Draft 1 (Translation)


English Translation

Translation by Good Haro. Translator's notes are in { brackets }.

NEON GENESIS EVANGELION EPISODE 24 "THE FINAL ANGEL" (SECOND DRAFT)

INT. NERV HQ - COMMAND CENTER

Misato stands before Ikari and Fuyutsuki.

MISATO: (Looking shocked) The Fifth Child…… really!?

IKARI: Yes, the fifth candidate will be arriving shortly. Overwrite Second's personal data in Unit 02 with the Fifth's.

MISATO: But, what about Asuka……?

IKARI: We can't keep useless items lying around forever. Send her back to Germany when you have an opportunity. That is all.

MISATO: ……

IKARI: Do you have something to say to me?

MISATO: No…… Excuse me.

FUYUTSUKI: The Fifth Child. He's probably a SEELE spy.

IKARI : He's coming here directly, bypassing the Marduk mechanism.

FUYUTSUKI: They seem to be quite impatient now.

IKARI: Let's watch and wait for a bit. According to the Dead Sea Scrolls there's still one Angel left.


THE LAST ANGEL



A WESTERN-QIN STYLE PAINTING OF A RURAL EUROPEAN LANDSCAPE (ASUKA'S DREAM)

Asuka on her way home from school (age 12), her eyes light up as she runs home.


INT. HOME

Asuka bursts in, a big smile on her face.

ASUKA: Mama! I was chosen! I was chosen as an elite pilot to protect humanity! To protect the world!

She says, placing her bag on the sofa and walking about the house.

ASUKA: It's a secret. But can tell you Mama! Everyone's so nice to me. So it won't be lonely.

But Asuka's mother doesn't respond.
We just hear the voices coming from the TV.

ASUKA: (With a slightly anxious expression) So, it doesn't matter that Papa's not here. We won't be lonely.

Asuka's mother is nowhere to be seen.

ASUKA: Hey, Mama, where are you? Mama! Mama!

Suddenly a THUMP THUMP THUMP! Comes a knock at the door.

MISATO: Asuka! Asuka!


INT. NERV HQ, GEOFRONT, RESIDENTIAL SECTOR ASUKA's ROOM

The door opens with a BAM! Misato crashes in with emergency medical personnel.

MISATO: Asuka……!

Asuka is curled up in a corner of the room, hugging her knees. Her eyes are blank and sunken, her cheeks are hollow, her lips pale. She barely resembles herself.
A male paramedic checks her eyes and tongue with a pen light.

PARAMEDIC: It doesn't seem like she's been eating or drinking. She's very dehydrated. She needs to be hospitalized immediately.

MISATO: Asuka! Do you want to die or something!?

ASUKA: (Crackely) There's no reason for me to be here anymore…… There's no reason for me to go on living……

MISATO: ––

A stretcher is brought in and Asuka is put on it.


INT. NERV HQ - HALLWAY

The stretcher with Asuka on it comes out of room #02.
A bit after, Misato follows.
Misato notices Shinji standing in the hall.

SHINJI: What's wrong?

MISATO: Nothing. Asuka's just not feeling very well. She'll be okay.

SHINJI: Oh……

MISATO: Bye––

And Misato leaves, following the stretcher.


INT. CAGE

Unit 01 submerged in coolant.


INT. UNIT 01 - ENTRY PLUG

Shinji appears to be in low spirits.

SHINJI: (MONO) Nothing…… huh. Misato didn't tell me the truth. I wonder what happened to Asuka. And Ayanami……

Insert –– The Reis in the test tube all look toward us at once.

SHINJI: (Sighing) Mom, what is Dad doing?

Unit 01 doesn't answer.


INT. SPECIAL SOLITARY CELL

Ritsuko is bound in a small room of iron bars.
She's bound by several leather straps, her once commanding expression is nowhere to be seen. It's almost like her soul has left her body.
Thunk, thunk, thunk…… Eventually we hear footsteps coming from the hall.
Ikari's figure appears in the faint light.

RITSUKO: (Still blankly) My cat died…… The one I left in my grandmother's care…… I never really took care of it, but…… all of a sudden…… I'll never see it again.

IKARI: Professor Akagi, why did you destroy the dummy plug?

Ritsuko doesn't respond, she just looks ahead, with a faint smile on her lips.

IKARI: I'll ask again. Why?

RITSUKO: Because you're a shitty lay. Plus, I didn't destroy the dummy system. I destroyed Rei……

IKARI: What?

RITSUKO: Those things aren't human. They're just human shaped objects. So they didn't die. They were destroyed. Rei is just your plaything. I never could became your plaything though……

IKARI: ––

RITSUKO: I wonder, Commander, did you come here because your new toy isn't working out so well? Since a familiar toy is here. Just do what you will. I'll do whatever. But, I'm sure I can't compete with the playful spirit of that doll of yours.

IKARI: You're a disappointment.

RITSUKO: Disappointment……?

Ritsuko suddenly bursts into raucous laughter.

RITSUKO: You never wanted anything to begin with! You wanted nothing from me! Nothing!

Tears spill out, and her laughter suddenly turns into sobs.
Ikari stands there silently.
Gashann! The door closes and the sound of Ritsuko's sobs are cut off.


INT. HALL - DREAM

Shinji stands in front of the elevator.
The door opens.
Rei is inside.
Countless Reis are reflected in the stainless steel.
Shinji and Rei's eyes meet and Shinji is petrified.


INT. SHINJI'S ROOM

Shinji throws himself onto his bed.

SHINJI: ……


EXT. AERIAL VIEW OF TOKYO-3

The city is in ruins from Unit 00's suicide attack during the previous battle.
Shinji wanders about the abandoned city, a strong wind blowing through as he stumbles over the rubble.


EXT. ANOTHER AREA

Shinji is walking about, he hears a piano coming from somewhere.


EXT. SCHOOL

The blast has turned the building to ruins.


INT. SCHOOL - GYMNASIUM

A lone boy innocently plays the piano.
He has a shockingly beautiful face.
The boy notices Shinji's gaze and stops playing

BOY: Oh, is someone there?

SHINJI: Who are……? You're not a student of this school are you?

BOY: I'm a transfer student.

SHINJI: Transfer student?

BOY: I brought my transfer papers where the school was supposed to be, but as I suspected, not a soul is here.

SHINJI: Everyone was sent away to Tokyo-2. Both the teachers and students.

BOY: Why are you still here?

SHINJI: I was left behind.

BOY: Haha. Poor thing.

An ominous sound fills the building.

SHINJI: The wind……

BOY: I thought it might have been the sound of spirit voices.

SHINJI: Spirit voices?

BOY: Didn't you know? In the dead of night in the school gymnasium, you can hear voices making merry.

SHINJI: No.

BOY: They say that the spirits of children who aren't done playing leave their bodies as they sleep, and gather in these places.

SHINJI: Huh.

BOY: In the Heian period, they called this flitting out of spirits, "akugaru" which has now become the word "akogareru." {I'm stumped on a good English rendition for this, "akugaru" is like Kaworu says, that whole spirit leaving the body thing, but I guess the fundamental idea here is one's soul being drawn out by some strong desire. The modern word which allegedly derives from it is "akogareru" or "to yearn for" (or admire, but I think yearning fits most here)}

The ominous sound fills the building again.
Shinji looks up at the ceiling, frightened.
It almost seems like we can hear the voices of those children in the sound.
Shinji comes back to his senses and notices that the boy is gone.

SHINJI: (Looking around) ––Hey! Where'd you go!

But the boy doesn't respond.

SHINJI: ……


INT. GEOFRONT, LOBBY OF THE CEILING BUILDING {天井ビル again, whatever that is}

Rei has been awaiting orders.
Shinji comes a bit later, and stands next to her.

REI: ––What?

SHINJI: Uh……

REI: You seem startled. You were looking at me in the elevator.

SHINJI: Not really……

REI: Oh.

And that's when Misato comes in, with someone else in tow.

MISATO: Alright you two, everyone's here. Let me introduce you. This is a new pilot candidate, Nagisa Kaworu.

SHINJI: The Fifth Child……?

Shinji is shocked when he sees him.
He's the boy he saw in the gymnasium playing piano.

MISATO: This is the pilot of Eva Unit 01, Ikari Shinji. And formerly Unit 00's pilot, Ayanami Rei.

KAWORU: Pleased to meet you. I look forward to working together.

REI: (Expressionlessly) Same here.

MISATO: (To Kaworu) If there's anything you need to know about living here, just ask Shinji.

KAWORU: (Holding out his hand). Pleased to meet you, Ikari Shinji.

As they shake hands, he looks intently at Shinji's eyes.
Shinji looks away.
Kaworu smiles when he sees this.


INT. NERV HQ - PLUG TEST ROOM

Three test plugs are submerged in liquid.
Rei, Kaworu and Shinji have their eyes closed.
Slowly and quietly they sink into the interior.


INT. NERV HQ - CONTROL ROOM

The three of them are on the monitors.

IBUKI: #0 is nearing the contamination limit. That's as far as she can go. #1 and #5 can go a bit further.

MISATO: You mean his harmonics are better than Rei's?

IBUKI: They're way beyond Shinji's numbers from before when that happened.

Kaworu's wave pattern comes up on the screen.

IBUKI: Take a look at #5's personal pattern! He shouldn't be compatible with Unit 02, but they're so similar.

MISATO: So he can sync with Unit 01!?

IBUKI: It should be impossible.

MISATO: Did you hear that from Ritsuko…… Professor Akagi?

IBUKI: No…… I was informed about the Fifth's existence though.

MISATO: Estimate his sync rate with Unit 02.

IBUKI: (Calculating) 270%!

MISATO: Could that happen in Unit 02 too……!?

IBUKI: No way, I don't believe it!

MISATO: But it is true. We've gotta accept it, find out the cause.


INT. NERV HQ - TEST SITE

The plug hatches open after the test ends.
After Shinji gets out, he hurries to leave.
Kaworu watches him from behind.


INT. NERV HQ - PUBLIC BATH

Shinji taking a bath.
We hear the door open and close.
Kaworu's slender figure appears out of the steam.

KAWORU: You always head off before everyone.

Shinji averts his eyes from Kaworu's naked body.

KAWORU: I wonder, are you avoiding me?

SHINJI: I'm not avoiding you or anything.

KAWORU: You're such a liar. You totally are.

SHINJI: You should have told me you were the Fifth Child.

KAWORU: That's my line. I didn't know you were the Third. ––Are you mad about that?

SHINJI: Not really.

KAWORU: Is it always like this? Like, kinda tense?

SHINJI: Tense?

KAWORU: Both Lieutenant Katsuragi and you.

SHINJI: A lot of stuff has happened. Before you came, Mr. Kaji and Ayanami, they……

KAWORU: What happened to the First?

SHINJI: Uh…… Nevermind.

KAWORU: Tell me.

SHINJI: I don't want to talk about it.

KAWORU: Oh, so it's confidential.

SHINJI: ……

Kaworu enters the water.

KAWORU: But, it's made you pretty timid when it comes to human contact.

SHINJI: I've always been like this. If I don't know someone, we can't betray or hurt each other.

KAWORU: But isn't that kind of lonesome?

SHINJI: That's just how it is. I was born this way. I can't change. I hate that about myself so much. To be honest, I want to scream and run away from myself.

KAWORU: But I always hear you saying that you mustn't run away.

SHINJI: I figure, if I'll get reborn as a new person when I die, I don't mind if I do.

KAWORU: I dunno about that. You seem to be a person who values yourself above all else.

SHINJI: ……

KAWORU: (Abruptly) Let me see your hand.

SHINJI: Huh……?

KAWORU: Your left hand.

Kaworu takes Shinji's left hand and examines his palm.
Shinji is startled when he notices several scars on Kaworu's wrist.

KAWORU: You have callouses on your finger tips.

SHINJI: It's from playing cello.

KAWORU: Cello?

SHINJI: I play a little.

KAWORU: How lovely.

Kaworu gripping his left hand.
Skin touching skin……
Badump, badump, Shinji's heart pounds wildly.

SHINJI: Sorry…… I need to get out……

He says, letting go of Kaworu's hand and leaving the bath.

Shinji's heart pounds even harder.
He staggers to his feet.
Shinji faints.

WIPE OUT


INT. NERV HQ, RESIDENTIAL AREA - SHINJI'S ROOM

Shinji realizes he's lying on his bed.
Kaworu is looking down at him.

KAWORU: You awake?

SHINJI: ……

KAWORU: You passed out. You really scared me when you collapsed.

SHINJI: Sorry…… for being such a bother.

KAWORU: You must be tired. I'm sure. So much has happened.

SHINJI: Yeah. A lot has happened……

Kaworu notices the cello in the corner of the room.

KAWORU: Is that yours?

SHINJI: Yeah.

KAWORU: It's a nice cello.

SHINJI: It was my mother's.

KAWORU: Oh, I know. We should play together. You on cello, me on piano. I'm sure it'll calm you down. It must be suffocating being trapped underground, just doing Eva tests all day.

SHINJI: But, I don't think my cello playing is as good as your piano. I'm embarrassed.

KAWORU: It'll just be for fun. Plus, what do we have to be embarrassed about at this point?

Shinji remembers his disgraceful behavior, and his pale face turns bright red again.

KAWORU: Is there a piano somewhere around here?

SHINJI: I think there should be one in the lounge.

KAWORU: I have a startup test with Unit 02 tomorrow. Let's go tomorrow after that. Promise?

SHINJI: Okay.

KAWORU: Well, I should be going.

SHINJI: Good night.

KAWORU: Good night––

Kaworu's face slides toward Shinji's.
Kaworu gives Shinji a kiss.
Shinji doesn't refuse him, he notices how naturally he accepts it.
Feeling strangely calm, he looks up at the ceiling light.


SOMEWHERE IN THE GEOFRONT

Misato confiding in Hyuga.

MISATO: (Looking up from some papers) ––Dead Sea Scrolls!?

HYUGA: Yeah. I tried investigating the Fifth like you said, Ms. Katsuragi, but as I was digging, I found something strange in an unexpected place.

MISATO: So you're saying the Angels are mentioned in the Dead Sea Scrolls?

HYUGA: Not just the Angels. But Adam, the Second Impact and the Human Instrumentality Project even.

MISATO: (Scanning over the end of the document) So there's one Angel left……?

HYUGA: It seems like the higher ups knew already.

MISATO: The commander?

HYUGA: Not just him, but the assistant commander and even Professor Akagi too. Nerv's predecessor organization, Gehrin seems to have been based on the scenario detailed in these Dead Sea Scrolls.

MISATO: ……

HYUGA: Seems like we both got ourselves tangled up in some ridiculous organization, huh?

Hyuga hands Misato some more documents.

HYUGA: Here's my research on the Fifth Child. There's nothing suspicious in his history. Before he came, he had some contact with the committee, but there are no traces of it being organized. It seems like a lot has happened in his family life. Well, I guess he's just a pretty boy who's experienced much misfortune.

MISATO: Just your type, huh. {whaa, Hyuga's a homo?}

HYUGA: Jeez……

Misato flips through the pages of the documents and her face grows dim when she sees something.

HYUGA: What is it?

MISATO: His birthday……

HYUGA: (Looking over at the document) ––?

MISATO: It's the day of the Second Impact……


INT. NERV HQ - PILOT'S LOCKER ROOM

Kaworu is changing.
He clicks the switch on his wrist and the plugsuit conforms to his body.
Kaworu gazes at his wrist for a bit.


INT. NERV HQ - TEST SITE #7

The voices of the operators come and go over the intercom.
They're preparing for Unit 02's activation test.


INT. NERV HQ - HALLWAY

Kaworu heads out having changed.
Rei is waiting for him.

REI: (Handing over a card) Here. It's a flow chart of today's startup test. Please look it over, including the times.

KAWORU: Thank you.

Rei and Kaworu's fingers touch ever so slightly as he takes it from her.
Their expressions change as if they've both realized something.

KAWORU: So that's what Ikari meant……

REI: ––

KAWORU: You're just like me. I think I have a better idea of what I'm supposed to do now.

REI: Just who, are you……?

KAWORU: (Without answering) Well, bye.

And he leaves.

Rei watches him walk off.


INT. UNIT 02 ENTRY PLUG

Kaworu inside.

IBUKI'S VOICE: Commencing Unit 02 activation test.


INT. CONTROL ROOM

Misato, Ibuki and the operators are at their stations.

IBUKI: Initiating first connection phase. All main electric circuits connected.

OPERATOR A: Electric connections complete. Initiating activation system.

OPERATOR B: Operation voltage at critical in 0.5……0.2……breakthrough.


INT. UNIT 02 ENTRY PLUG

OPERATOR A'S VOICE: Initiating connection between pilot and Unit 02.

OPERATOR B'S VOICE: Circuits open.


INT. HALLWAY

Shinji watching the activation test from the window.

ANNOUNCER: Absolute border* in 0.9, 0.7, 0.5, 0.4, 0.3…… {*絶対境界線 - sorry, I don't remember how most of the technobabble terms translate 'officially,' so I'm kinda bullshitting through these parts}


INT. NERV HQ - TEST SITE #7

Unit 02 tears off its restraints and begins to struggle.


INT. CONTROL ROOM

IBUKI: Contact suspended!

OPERATOR C: It's not working, we can't control Unit 02!

IBUKI: Isolate all circuits! Cut the power!


INT. NERV HQ - TEST SITE #7

The [umbilical] connector is shot out of the socket.
Unit 02 begins to destroy the walls.


INT. HALLWAY

The ceiling is crumbling.
Shinji hurriedly escapes.


INT. CONTROL ROOM

MISATO: Another berserker!?

IBUKI: No, it's not berserk. It's moving according to the pilot's wishes!


INT. ANNOUNCEMENT AREA {like wherever the PA system mics and shit are I guess}

A warning alarm sounds.

HYUGA: (Into the mic) We've detected and AT field from Unit 02 in test site #7!


INT. CONTROL ROOM

MISATO: No way. You mean he's an Angel!?


INT. HALL

SHINJI: No! That's a lie!


INT. ANNOUNCEMENT AREA

FUYUTSUKI: A humanoid Angel!

IKARI: So SEELE held the joker themselves.


INT. NERV HQ - TEST SITE #7

Unit 02 has destroyed everything it could [in the area].
And then it breaks through the wall and leaves.


INT. CONTROL ROOM

MISATO: It's heading for Dogma!


INT. ANNOUNCEMENT AREA

A spot on the screen is flashing to indicate where Unit 02 broke through.

AOBA: Unit 02 is heading for the underground structure.

FUYUTSUKI: You're going to allow an Angel to enter Dogma again?

IKARI: Sortie Unit 01 immediately. Prevent [the Angel] from entering Terminal Dogma at all costs.


INT. CAGE

Shinji runs along the catwalk.
Rei is standing at the hatch, already in her plugsuit, trying to get into Unit 01's entry plug.

SHINJI: ––Ayanami!

REI: I'll go.

SHINJI: Why?

REI: Because you have feelings for him. {she uses あこがれる, I only mention this because Kaworu brings up the word earlier}

SHINJI: ––

REI: You won't be able to dispose of him will you?

SHINJI: I'm the pilot of Unit 01……

Shinji pushes Rei aside and opens the hatch.


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Unit 02 moving down.


INT. CAGE

Unit 01 sortieing and heading underground.


INT. ANNOUNCEMENT AREA

Misato, Ibuki and the others return.

HYUGA: Unit 01 has departed.

MISATO: Will Shinji make it in time?

HYUGA: It's 50-50 at this point.

MISATO: (In Hyuga's ear) If worst comes to worst, we'll have to destroy everything. We can't let it affect the rest of the world.

HYUGA: I don't mind, if it's with you.

MISATO: Thanks.

Hyuga, calmly as ever, plugs in the key for the self-destruct switch.


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Unit 01 is descending at immense speed.


INT. UNIT 01 ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: (Frantic and angry) Damnittt!


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Unit 02 descending.

Finally, Unit 01 catches up.


INT. UNIT 01 ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: You betrayed me! You betrayed my feelings! You betrayed me just like my father!


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Unit 01 pulls out its prog knife.
Unit 02 follows suit, accepting the challenge.
They fight viciously hand to hand with the knives.
The blades cross repeatedly, discharging plasma, sparks fly.


INT. ANNOUNCEMENT AREA

Everyone holds their breath watching the Evas fight.


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

The two Evas finally reach the bottom.
A wall crumbles, revealing Adam.


INT. UNIT 01 ENTRY PLUG

The crucified upper body of the seven-eyed giant.
The bizarre, objet d'art makes Shinji flinch for a second.


INT. ANNOUNCEMENT AREA

MISATO: Shinji!


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Without hesitation, Unit 02 slices Unit 01 with its blade.
Unit 01's prog knife pops off and falls into the sea of LCL.


INT. UNIT 01 ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: ---!


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Unit 01 and Unit 02 do battle in front of Adam.
But, Unit 02 throws away its prog knife.
It vanishes into the sea of LCL.

KAWORU: The Eva series. Born of Adam, a being you should have stayed away from. But you Lilin used it and survived. I don't understand it.

Unit 02 stops moving.
The entry plug comes out slowly and Kaworu gets out.


INT. UNIT 01 ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: You tricked me? Were you just using me?

KAWORU: That's not it at all. I think it was a wonderful thing that I got to meet you. I've reached my destination. I have no intent to continue fighting. I never wanted to quarrel with you in the first place.


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Kaworu before Adam.

KAWORU: Once I touch this monster, the path of humanity will close.


INT. UNIT 01 ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: The path of humanity?

KAWORU: Yes, the path of human evolution. But, it really doesn't matter either way to me. You're the only one who can end my life. If it's by your hand, I couldn't be happier, even if it means my death. I do feel a little regretful that we didn't have a chance to perform together though.

SHINJI: Let's go back together. We'll do it together. I got up early this morning to practice a bit even.


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

KAWORU: I'm sorry, but I can't. I can feel something stirring inside me. I think it's my instinct.


INT. UNIT 01 ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: ……

KAWORU: Hurry!


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Kaworu suddenly turns and dives toward Adam.


INT. UNIT 01 ENTRY PLUG

SHINJI: ––!


INT. CENTRAL DOGMA

Unit 01 reaches out and grabs the Angel just before it makes contact with Adam.
Crunch.
Blood flows from Unit 01's hand, trickling down.
Finally, Shinji's screams fill the huge room.


INT. ANNOUNCEMENT AREA

MISATO: ……

Hyuga removes the self-destruct key.

FUYUTSUKI: It's over.

IKARI: Yes. But, now the real battle begins.


INT. SOMEWHERE - HUMAN INSTRUMENTALITY PROJECT

The committee is gathered.

KEEL: We've just confirmed the elimination of the AT Field. Adam's children, the Angels are all destroyed. The only remaining Angels are us, humanity. The promised time has come, for when we shall entrust our souls to Lilith and purify this filthy world.

MEMBER A: But before that, we should do something about this troublesome pimple on our face. {oh why can't I remember the English idiom for this}

MEMBER B: Ikari Gendou.

MEMBER C: He's been using his position as commander to turn Nerv into his personal property.

MEMBER D: We have clear evidence that he's been diverting from the plan.

KEEL: Gentlemen! I hereby declare Nerv dissolved and the Eva project suspended.

Original Japanese

新世紀エヴァンゲリオン 第弐拾四話「最後のシ者」(第弐稿)

○(F・I)ネルフ本部・司令公務室


碇、冬月の前に立つミサト。


ミサト: 「(驚いた様子で)フィフス・チルドレン・・・・・・ですか!?」

碇: 「ああ、5人目の適任者がまもなく届く。弐号機のパーソナルデータはセカンドからフィフスに書き換える」

ミサト: 「では、アスカは・・・・・・?」

碇: 「役に立たぬものをいつまでも置いておくわけにはいかぬ。適当な時期にドイツに送還してくれたまえ。話は以上だ」

ミサト: 「・・・・・・」

碇: 「何か言いたいことがあるのか」

ミサト: 「いえ・・・・・・。失礼致します」

冬月: 「フィフス・チルドレン。おそらくゼーレのスパイだな」

碇: 「マルドゥック機関を通さず、直接送り込んで来た」

冬月: 「やつらも相当焦っているな」

碇: 「しばらく様子を見るさ。死海文書によると、まだ最後の使徒が残っている」


「 最 後 の シ 者 」


○秦西名画のごとき欧州の田園風景(アスカの夢)


学校帰りのアスカ(12歳)が目を輝かせ、家に向かって駆けて行く。


○家・中


喜色満面のアスカが飛び込んでくる。


アスカ: 「ママ! 私、選ばれたの! 人類を守るエリートパイロットなのよ! 世界一よっ! 」


と鞄をソファーに置き、家の中を歩き回る。


アスカ: 「誰にも秘密なの。でもママにだけ、教えるわね! いろんな人が親切にしてくれるわ。だから、寂しくなんかないわ」


だが、ママからの返事はない。
つけっ放しのテレビの音声が聞こえてくるだけだ。


アスカ: 「(少し不安な表情になり)だから、パパがいなくなっても大丈夫。寂しくなんかないわ」


どこにもママはいない。


アスカ: 「ねえママ、どこにいるの! ママ! ママ!」


いきなりドンドンドンドン! とドアを叩く音がINする。


ミサト: 「アスカ! アスカ!」


○ネルフ本部地下・居住区域・アスカの個室


バーン! とドアが蹴破られ、ミサトと救急医療班の数名が飛び込んでくる。


ミサト: 「アスカ・・・・・・!」


アスカは部屋の片隅に膝を抱えて座り込んでいる。目は虚ろで落ち窪み、頬の肉は削げ、唇は白く変色し、まるで別人のようだ。
ペンライトでアスカの瞳孔の反応や舌の状態を確認する救急医療班の男。


医療班の男: 「水も食料も摂ってなかったようですね。ひどい脱水症状を起こしています。至急、入院が必要です」

ミサト: 「アスカ! あんた、こんなことして、死ぬ気!?」

アスカ: 「(かすれて)もう、ここにいる理由はないもの・・・・・・私が生きていく、理由もないわ・・・・・・」

ミサト: 「——」


ストレッチャーが運ばれ、アスカはその上に乗せられる。


○同・廊下


02の部屋からアスカを乗せたストレッチャーが運び出される。
やや遅れて、ミサトが出てくる。
ミサト、廊下にシンジが立っているのに気づく。


シンジ: 「どうしたの?」

ミサト: 「何でもないわ。アスカの調子がちょっと悪くなっただけ。大丈夫だから」

シンジ: 「そう・・・・・・」

ミサト: 「じゃあ——」


と、ストレッチャーの後を追い、去って行く。


○ケイジ


冷却液に浸かっているエヴァンゲリオン初号機。


○初号機・エントリープラグ


塞ぎ込んだ様子のシンジ。


シンジ: 「(MONO)何でもないわ・・・・・・か。ミサトさんは本当の事を教えてくれない。アスカ、どうしちゃったんだろ。それに綾波・・・・・・」


インサート——一斉にこちらを向く、試験管に入ったレイたち。


シンジ: 「(ポツリと)母さん、父さんは何をしているんだ?」


何も答えない初号機。


○特別単独監房


薄暗くて狭い鉄格子の部屋にリツコが拘束されている。
幾筋もの革の紐で雁字搦めに捕縛されているその姿は、かつての凛然とした面影はなく、まるで魂の抜け殻のようだ。
コツ、コツ、コツ・・・・・・、やがて廊下から靴音が聞こえてくる。
仄かな明りに浮かび上がる碇の姿。


リツコ: 「(放心した様子のまま)猫が死んだの・・・・・・おばあちゃんの所に預けていた・・・・・・ずっとかまっていなかったのに・・・・・・突然・・・・・・もう会えなくなるのね」

碇: 「赤木博士、何故、ダミープラグを破壊した?」


リツコは答えず、薄笑いを浮かべたまま、目の前を見つめている。


碇: 「もう一度聞く。何故だ」

リツコ: 「あなたに抱かれてうれしくなくなった、から。それに、私が壊したのはダミーではないわ。壊したのは、レイ・・・・・・」

碇: 「何だと」

リツコ: 「アレは人間じゃないわ。人の形をしたモノ。だから死んだんじゃないの。壊れちゃったの。レイはあなたの玩具。もっとも私もあなたの玩具には変りなかったけど・・・・・・」

碇: 「——」

リツコ: 「司令が来たのは新しい玩具の調子が悪かったせいかしら。ここには馴染んだ玩具がありますからね。好きにしたらどうです。何でもしてさし上げますよ。あのお人形さんほど遊び心地はよくないでしょうけど」

碇: 「君には失望した」

リツコ: 「失望・・・・・・?」


突然、堰を切ったようにゲラゲラ嗤い出すリツコ。


リツコ: 「最初から何も望んでなかったくせに! 私には何も! 何も!」


ボロボロと涙が零れ、嗤いはいつしか嗚咽に変わっていく。
黙って立ち去っていく碇。
ガッシャーン! ドアの閉まる音が、リツコの泣き声を遮断する。


○ホール(夢)


エレベーターの前に立つシンジ。
開くドア。
その奥にレイ。
ステンレスの壁面が無数のレイの鏡像を映し出している。
レイと目が合い、硬直してしまうシンジ。


○シンジの部屋


パッと、ベッドから跳ね起きるシンジ


シンジ: 「・・・・・・」



○第3新東京市・全景

先の戦いにおける零号機の自爆で、第3新東京市は壊滅状態となっている。
風の吹き荒れる中、瓦礫を踏みしめ、ゴーストタウンを彷徨するシンジ。



  ○一角

歩いていたシンジ、どこからかピアノの音が聞こえてくるのに気づく。


  ○第壱中学校・外観

爆風で廃墟と化している。


 

○同・体育館

一人の少年が、無心にピアノを奏でている。
ぞっとするような美貌も持ち主だ。
少年、シンジを見ているのに気づき、演奏を中断する。

少年: 「何だ。人がいたんだ」

シンジ: 「君は・・・・・・? この学校の生徒じゃないよね」

少年: 「転入生さ」

シンジ: 「転入生?」

少年: 「この学校にはいるつもりで転入届を持って来たんだけど、案の定、人っ子一人、いやしない」

シンジ: 「みんな第2東京に疎開しちゃったよ。先生も生徒も」

少年: 「何で君は残ってるの?」

シンジ: 「置いてきぼりにされたんだ」

少年: 「ハハハ。かわいそうに」

 その時、建物全体が不気味な響きをたてる。

シンジ: 「風だ・・・・・・」

少年: 「僕はまた、魂の声が聞こえて来たのだと思った」

シンジ: 「魂の声?」

少年: 「学校の体育館て、真夜中になるとはしゃぎ声が聞こえて来るって知ってた?」

シンジ: 「ううん」

少年: 「まだ遊び足りない子供たちの魂が眠っている体を抜け出して、集まって来るからだって」

シンジ: 「ふうん」

少年: 「平安時代には、魂がフラフラ出歩くことを ”あくがる” と言って、それが今の ”あこがれる” の元の形なんだって」

 再び建物全体が不気味な響きをたてる。
 シンジはおびえたように天井を見上げる。
 そういえば、その共鳴音が子供たちの声にも聞こえてくる。
 シンジ、ふと我に返ると、少年がいないのに気づく。

シンジ: 「(辺りを見回し)——君! 君!」

 だが、少年の返事はない。

シンジ: 「・・・・・・」


 

○ジオフロント・天井ビルのロビー

先に待機しているレイ。
シンジが遅れて来て、横に並ぶ。

レイ: 「——何?」

シンジ: 「え・・・・・・」

レイ: 「驚いてたようだったから。エレベーターで私を見て」

シンジ: 「別に・・・・・・」

レイ: 「そう」

 そこへミサトが誰かを伴って、やって来る。

ミサト: 「二人とも、揃っているわね。紹介するわ。新しく来た、パイロット候補。渚カヲル君よ」

シンジ: 「フィフス・チルドレン・・・・・・ですか」

 その彼を見て、驚くシンジ。
 学校の体育館でピアノを弾いてた、あの少年だ。

ミサト: 「エヴァ初号機パイロットの碇シンジ君。零号機のパイロットだった綾波レイさん」

カヲル: 「はじめまして。よろしく」

レイ: 「(無表情なまま)こちらこそ」

ミサト: 「(カヲルに)ここでの生活でわからないことがあったら、シンジ君に聞いて」

カヲル: 「(手を差し伸べ)よろしく。碇シンジ君」

 握手しながら、じっとシンジの目を見る。
 シンジ、目をそらしてしまう。
 その様子を見て、微笑むカヲル。


○ネルフ本部・テストプラグ実験場

水溶液のプールに浸かっている3つのテストプラグ。
目をつぶっているレイ、シンジ、カヲル。
ゆっくりと静かに、インテリアが沈み込んでいる。


○同・制御室

モニターされている3人。

伊吹: 「0番、汚染区域に隣接。限界です。1番、5番にはまだまだ余裕があります」

ミサト: 「彼のハーモニクスがレイを上回っているというわけ?」

伊吹: 「アレが起こる前のシンジ君の数値をもはるかに越えています」

 モニターに映るカヲルの波形パターン。

伊吹: 「5番のパーソナルパターンを見て下さい! 互換性のないはずの弐号機と酷似してます」

ミサト: 「弐号機とのシンクロが可能なの!?」

伊吹: 「システム上、ありえないはずです」

ミサト: 「リツコから・・・・・・赤木博士から聞いていた?」

伊吹: 「いえ・・・・・・。フィフスの存在については知らされていましたが」

ミサト: 「弐号機と接続したときの予測シンクロ率を積算してみて」

伊吹: 「(積算して)270%です!」

ミサト: 「弐号機にもアレが起こるっていうの・・・・・・!?」

伊吹: 「まさか、信じられません!」

ミサト: 「でも真実なのよ。事実をまず受け止めてから、原因をさぐって」


○同・実験場

テストが終わり、プラグのハッチが開く。
出て来たシンジは、そそくさとその場から立ち去ってしまう。
シンジの背に視線を送っているカヲル。


 

○同・大浴場

浴槽につかっているシンジ。
戸の開閉音。
湯煙の中にカヲルのなよやかな肢体が浮かび上がる。

カヲル: 「いつも先に行っちゃうんだね」

 シンジ、カヲルの裸体から目を離す。

カヲル: 「僕のことを避けているのかな」

シンジ: 「避けてなんかないよ」

カヲル: 「嘘だ、避けてる」

シンジ: 「フィフス・チルドレンなら、そうと言ってくれたらいいのに」

カヲル: 「それはこっちのセリフだよ。君がサードだなんて知らなかった。——そのことを怒ってるのかな」

シンジ: 「そうゆうわけじゃないけど」

カヲル: 「いつもそうなの? 何かギスギスしている」

シンジ: 「ギスギス?」

カヲル: 「葛城3佐にしても、君にしても」

シンジ: 「いろいろあったんだ。君の来る前に。加持さんのこととか、綾波のこととか・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「ファーストがどうかしたの?」

シンジ: 「ううん・・・・・・何でもない」

カヲル: 「言えよ」

シンジ: 「言いたくない」

カヲル: 「守秘義務ってやつか」

シンジ: 「・・・・・・」

 カヲルも湯の中に入る。

カヲル: 「でも、それだと臆病になっちゃうね。人と触れ合うことが」

シンジ: 「もともと僕はそうだから。他人を知らなければ、裏切られることも、互いに傷つくこともないもの」

カヲル: 「それって、寂しくない?」

シンジ: 「仕方ないさ。そうゆうふうに生まれついたんだ。自分を変えることはできないよ。僕だって、そんな自分が嫌で嫌でたまらないんだ。本当は叫び声を上げて、自分から逃げ出したいんだ」

 カヲル、シンジの左の掌を取り、じっと見る。
 シンジはカヲルの手首に幾筋もの傷が残っているのに気づき、ドキッとなる。

カヲル: 「そのくせ、逃げちゃだまだと自分で言い聞かせてるんだね」

シンジ: 「死んで別の人間に生まれ変われるなら、死んだっていいとも思っている」

カヲル: 「それはどうかな。君は何よりも自分を一番大切にしている人だから」

シンジ: 「・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「(唐突に)手、見せて」

シンジ: 「え・・・・・・?」

カヲル: 「左手」

 カヲルに握られた左手。
 触れ合う肌と肌・・・・・・。
 どくん、どくん、とシンジの心臓の鼓動が激しくなる。

カヲル: 「指先の皮が固くなってる」

シンジ: 「チェロの弦のせいだよ」

カヲル: 「チェロ?」

シンジ: 「少し、弾いてるんだ」

カヲル: 「それは素敵だ」

シンジ: 「ごめん・・・・・・僕、もう上がるから・・・・・・」

 と、カヲルの手を解き、浴槽を出る。

 さらに高鳴るシンジの胸の鼓動。
 ふらつく足元。
 シンジ、スーッと気が遠くなっていく。

 (Wipe Out)


○ネルフ本部・居住地域・シンジの個室

シンジは自分のベッドに横たわっているのに気づく。
カヲルがシンジを見下ろしている。

カヲル: 「気がついた?」

シンジ: 「・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「のぼせちゃったんだね。倒れた時はびっくりしたよ」

シンジ: 「ごめん・・・・・・厄介をかけちゃって」

カヲル: 「疲れてるんだね。きっと。いろいろあったろうから」

シンジ: 「うん。いろいろなことがあった・・・・・・」

 カヲル、部屋の片隅においてあるチェロに気づく。

カヲル: 「これ、君の?」

シンジ: 「うん」

カヲル: 「いいチェロだ」

シンジ: 「母さんの形見なんだ」

カヲル: 「そうだ。一緒に音楽をやろうよ。君がチェロで、僕がピアノで。きっと気持ちが和らぐよ。こんな地下基地に籠りっぱなしで、エヴァのテストばかりじゃ息がつまってしまう」

シンジ: 「でも、僕のチェロは君のピアノほどうまくないから、恥ずかしいよ」

カヲル: 「気晴らしにやるんだからさ。それに、もう恥ずかしいことなんかないはずだよ」

 シンジ、自分の醜態を思い出し、青白かった顔が再び赤みを帯びる。

カヲル: 「ここにもピアノはあるんだろ?」

シンジ: 「たしかラウンジにあったはずだよ」

カヲル: 「明日は弐号機の起動試験がある。それが終わったら一緒にやろう。約束だよ」

シンジ: 「うん」

カヲル: 「じゃ、僕はそろそろ」

シンジ: 「おやすみ」

カヲル: 「おやすみ——」    カヲルの顔がスーッとシンジの顔に近づく。
 カヲル、シンジと口づけを交わす。
 シンジ、拒むことなく、自然に受け入れる自分に気づく。
 妙に冷静な気持ちになって、天井の明りを見ている。



○ジオフロントのどこか

密談しているミサトと日向。

ミサト: 「(書類から顔を上げ)——死海文書!?」

日向: 「ええ。葛城さんに言われて、あのフィフスの身辺を洗ってみたんですが、糸をたぐるうちに、思いもかけないところで妙なものが出て来ましたよ」

ミサト: 「その死海文書には、使徒のことが記されているというの?」

日向: 「使徒だけではありません。アダムのことも、セカンドインパクトのことも、人類補完計画のことも」

ミサト: 「(書類の終わりの方に目を通し)残る使徒はあと一体・・・・・・?」

日向: 「このことは上もご存じのようですね」

ミサト: 「司令が?」

日向: 「司令だけではありません、副指令も、赤城博士もご存じのようです。ネルフの前身組織であるゲヒルン設立は、この死海文書に基づいたシナリオだとか」

ミサト: 「・・・・・・」

日向: 「お互い、とんでもない組織に身を投じてしまいましたね」

 日向、別の資料をミサトに渡す。

日向: 「こちらはフィフスに関する調査資料です。来歴に関しても、何ら怪しいところはありません。こちらに来る前に、委員会との接点はありますが、オルグされた形跡はないようです。家庭的にはいろいろあったようですがね。ま、どこにでもいる薄幸の美少年というわけです」

ミサト: 「あなた好みのネ」

日向: 「まったア・・・・・・」

 パラパラと資料をめくっていたミサト、あるところを見て、顔色が曇る。

日向: 「どうかしましたか?」

ミサト: 「この子の生年月日・・・・・・」

日向: 「(資料を覗き込み)——?」

ミサト: 「セカンドインパクトがあった日よ・・・・・・」


 

○ネルフ本部・パイロット専用更衣室

着替えているカヲル。
手首のスイッチで、シュッとプラグスーツがフィットする。
しばし自分の手首を見つめるカヲル。


○同・第7実験場

行き交うオペレーターたちのアナウンス。
弐号機の起動試験の準備が進んでいる。


○同・通路

着替えを終えたカヲルが行く。
前方で待っているレイ。

レイ: 「(カードを渡し)これ、今日の起動試験のフローチャート。時間まで目を通しておいてくれって」

カヲル: 「ありがとう」

 受け取る時に、カヲルとレイの指先が、ほんの少しだけ触れる。
 お互い、何かに気づいたように、表情が変わる。

カヲル: 「碇君の言ってたことって、これか・・・・・・」

レイ: 「——」

カヲル: 「君は僕と同じなんだね。僕が何をすべきかも、ほんの少しわかりかけてきた」

レイ: 「あなた、一体、誰・・・・・・?」

カヲル: 「(それに答えず)じゃ、さよなら」

 、去って行く。

 その後ろ姿を、いつまでも見ているレイ。


○セントラルドグマ

を下降していく弐号機。


 

○ケイジ

地下へ向けて出撃する初号機。


 

○発令所

ミサト、伊吹らが戻っている。

日向: 「初号機、発進しました」

ミサト: 「シンジ君、間に合うかしら」

日向: 「勝算は五分五分ですね」

ミサト: 「(日向の耳元で)いざという時はここごと葬り去るしかないわね。地球全体を巻き添えにはできないもの」

日向: 「いいですよ、あなたと一緒なら」

ミサト: 「ありがとう」

 日向、あくまで淡々と、自爆スイッチのキーを差し込む。


  ○セントラルドグマ

物凄い勢いで駆け降りて行く初号機。


 

○初号機・エントリープラグ

シンジ: 「(必死の形相で)チクショーーッ!」


○セントラルドグマ

を下降していく弐号機。

やがて、それに初号機が追いつく。


 

○初号機・エントリープラグ

シンジ: 「裏切ったな! 僕の気持ちを裏切ったな! 父さんと同じに裏切ったんだ!」


○セントラルドグマ

プログナイフを抜く初号機。
弐号機もナイフを抜き、応戦する。
プログナイフ同士で激しい格闘が展開される。
二つのプログナイフが幾度も合い、プラズマを放ち、火花を飛ばす。


  ○発令所

固唾を飲んでエヴァ同士の戦いを見守っている一同。


○セントラルドグマ

遂に底にたどりついてしまう2体のエヴァ.
壁面が崩れ落ち、アダムの姿があらわになる。


  ○初号機・エントリープラグ

磔にされた7つ目の巨人の上半身。
その異様なオブジェに一瞬のひるみを見せるシンジ。


 

○発令所

ミサト: 「シンジ君ッ!」


  ○セントラルドグマ

弐号機がすかさず初号機に斬りかかる。
弾け飛ぶ初号機のプログナイフ、LCLの海に落ちていく。


 

○初号機・エントリープラグ

シンジ: 「——ッ!」



○セントラルドグマ

アダムを挟んで対峙する初号機と弐号機。
だが、弐号機は持っていたプログナイフを放り捨てる。
LCLの海に消えていくナイフ。

カヲルの声: 『エヴァシリーズ。アダムより生まれし、忌むすべき存在。それを利用してまで生き延びようとするリリン。僕にはわからないよ』

 活動を停止する弐号機。
 エントリープラグがせりあがり、中からカヲルが出て来る。


 

○初号機・エントリープラグ

シンジ: 「君は僕を騙していたの? 利用しただけなの?」

カヲル: 『それは違うよ。君と出会えて、とてもよかったと思っている。僕は目的地についた。もう戦うつもりはないよ。もともと争うつもりもなかったんだ』


 

○セントラルドグマ

アダムを前にするカヲル。

カヲル: 「僕がこの化け物に触れると、人の道は閉ざされる」


○初号機・エントリープラグ 


シンジ: 「人の道?」

カヲル: 『そう、人類の進化の道だ。でも僕にとって、そんなことはどちらでもいいことだ。僕の命を絶つことができるのは君だけだ。君の手にかかって、死ぬなら、こんなに幸福なことはない。一緒に楽器を演奏できなかったのが、少し残念だけど』

シンジ: 「このまま、二人で帰って、一緒にやろうよ。今朝、早起きして、少し練習したんだ」


○セントラルドグマ

カヲル: 「ごめん、できない。体の中で、何かが僕を突き動かそうとしているのがわかる。それは僕の本能なんだ」


○初号機・エントリープラグ

シンジ: 「・・・・・・」

カヲル: 「早く!」


 

○セントラルドグマ

 カヲル、いきなり身を翻したかと思うと、パッと跳躍し、アダムに向かってダイビングしていく。


 

○初号機・エントリープラグ

シンジ: 「——!」


○セントラルドグマ

初号機の腕が伸びて、アダムに接触する寸前にカヲルを掴む。
ぷちゅ。
初号機の掌の中から血が溢れ、LCLに滴り落ちている。
やがて、シンジの絶叫が巨大な空間に響き渡る。


○発令所

ミサト: 「・・・・・・」

 自爆のキーを外す日向

冬月: 「終わったな」

: 「ああ。だが、本当の戦いが始まるのはこれからだ」


 

○どこか(人類補完委員会)

委員会のメンバーが集まっている。

キール: 「たった今、ATフィールドの消滅が確認された。アダムの子供である、使徒はすべて滅んだ。残った最後の使徒は我々人類だけだ。リリスに魂を宿し、不浄な世界を浄化する、約束の時は来たのだ」

委員A: 「その前に、目の上のたん瘤を何とかせねばならん」

委員B: 「碇ゲンドウ」

委員C: 「総司令の地位を利用してネルフを私物化した」

委員D: 「奴がシナリオを踏み外そうとしていることは、これまでの事例によっても明らかだ」

キール: 「諸君、私はここにネルフの解体とエヴァシリーズの凍結を宣言する」

References

  1. 脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa"
  2. "In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script. The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.
    Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa
  3. Anno: That’s right, that’s right. There was a scene in a music room after an evacuation, when no one was there. Interviewer: What is the connection between Kaworu-kun and this image of music? Anno: I don’t think it was words. It was as communication, when he’d first come. Interviewer: Shinji also played the cello, and played music once, didn’t he? Or else, was that a variety of therapy, or something? Anno: No, I don’t know. That was the scriptwriters’ idea. Well, it was just that the character gave off the feeling of a cello. Interviewer: Did that first script do anything like take on that sort of form? Anno: It didn’t. It just went as far as the scenario.
  4. Anno: As might be expected, this was what you’d call above my tolerance level. [...] Anno: Around the time when you’re a middle school student, you often go with friends to public bath-houses and stuff, right? On the way home from school and so forth. Also, going there right after you go play at the beach, just as you are. There are more public baths in the boonies, you see. So it almost feels like a watering hole for men. Well, people don’t go washing each other’s backs or any skinship things like that. In any case, it’s a sort of place that you can all go to together, play there, and head home.
  5. Interviewer: Speaking about the blushing, is it because Shinji was happy that someone said they like him? Anno: Yes, Shinji kun really didn’t experience carnal desire there.
  6. The conclusion is that it probably was Akio Satsukawa. Nagisa can also be read as Messenger, perhaps he came up with the name when he was writing the script. We all think it fits Akio’s taste. What struck me most was how Akio expanded the world, he made Kaworu a JUNE character……Or I should say a male/male tanbi(“aesthetic”) romances character that went berserk. [...] Interviewer: Is this what they called the dreamy first script? Yes, Yes. In the end, Anno changed it to the bath scene. Anno took Akio’s idea into a very unique perspective, which end with this Kaworu who give you a decadent feeling, in my option. There is one thing that doesn’t need to cover up: they wrote EVA’s script as long as possible. In other words, the script they gave Anno had two Eps length, then Anno modified it into a story. So I think he probably cut off a lot of Kaworu’s story. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto
  7. I: But it caused female audiences in front of their televisions to shriek with joy. M: We never thought it will turn out like that. T: Was it not planned? M: We really only realised it afterwards and never thought of much at that time, after all we were going berserk. - Shizo/Parano interview "judging Hideaki Anno in his absence"
  8. M: That interview in which he pushes all responsibility to Satsukawa is interesting. But when we came up with the original idea, did it start out as such? H: eh? M: Not that level of homo, did Satsukawa up it? H: His descriptions are def top-notch. [Indicating, he is a good writer] M: In JUNE it shows that the scripts originally had skinny dipping, musical duets and stuff (laughs) A: Skinny dipping?! M: Yeah, completely naked. I didn’t want to draw that, like to a “If thats how it is I’ll quit” extent. A: Isn’t that basically porn? M: So when I stated we must change it, it became Anno’s expert bathing. A: His favourite public baths. H: Why hand-holding though? M: Because thats what the script said. H: (flips to the relevant page of the script) it says “touched his hand”. Isn’t it touched, but you drew “hold” (laughs). M: Because thats what the artist drew and I wasn’t really too concerned and ok-ed it. (laughs) there was basically no time. - NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4
  9. He wasn’t the last Angel from the baginning. At first, the information they gave me only said that Kaworu was a humanoid Angel who appeared at the finale stage of the Anime. But at that time, I had already worked out something similar—since the gradually appeared Angel all had different shapes and characteristics, they should become more closer to human. Then there also came with the subtitle “Cat and Transfer Student” when they were planing it. If I have to figure out Anno’s intention, I think he may awared the “Monster Messenger and Boy” (Ep.33) in The Return of Ultraman. It is where a monster named Muruchi appeared. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto
  10. Anno: "[...] In the initial stages, he was a pretty boy who carried around a cat. The very first plot title was “The cat and the transfer student.” It was a story about transfer student carrying a cat coming to the school and so forth. As we went on with it, in episode 24, it had already moved away from the school, so. It would have still have been good if it had come between episodes 11 and 16, though."
  11. https://forum.evageeks.org/post/364688/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#364688
  12. Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection