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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second <del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">early </del>draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">http://web.archive.org/web/20070311143105/</del>http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫)<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">, an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>"脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa<br>Illustrations included in this magazine are also made by a third-party doujinshi author, and are not official.</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong</del>.<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">" - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref><ref>"As for the Evangelion manga, Sadamoto claims to have made it entirely by himself, without consulting with anyone, so any differences with the anime were all decided solely by him; this in contrast to the anime where all decisions were made as a group, all sitting in the same room and arguing." - [https://wiki.evageeks.org/Statements_by_Evangelion_Staff#Yoshiyuki_Sadamoto%3A_Milan_Manga_Festival_.282013.29 Sadamoto Milan Manga Festival 2013]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected Anno and the rest of staff.'''</del></div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫).</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">There are several scenes and plot elements that were removed or moved to other episodes, indicating how early in conceptualizing the story Anno and staff were when these drafts were written. For instance, Shinji playing the cello was Satsukawa's idea according to Anno<ref>Anno: That’s right, that’s right. There was a scene in a music room after an evacuation, when no one was there.</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">Anno: It didn’t. It just went as far as the scenario.</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div> </div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">Anno: Around the time when you’re a middle school student, you often go with friends to public bath-houses and stuff, right? On the way home from school and so forth. Also, going there right after you go play at the beach, just as you are. There are more public baths in the boonies, you see. So it almost feels like a watering hole for men. Well, people don’t go washing each other’s backs or any skinship things like that. In any case, it’s a sort of place that you can all go to together, play there, and head home.</ref><ref>Interviewer: Speaking about the blushing, is it because Shinji was happy that someone said they like him?</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">Anno: Yes, Shinji kun really didn’t experience carnal desire there.</ref> Anno also mentions he fixed up the later script in a more final form. [http://forum.evageeks.org/post/363606/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#363606 This script is available] in [[Evangelion Original|Evangelion Original III]], it is the first one that includes Anno in the credits, and is very similar to the version aired in Episode 24, [http://forum.evageeks.org/post/472732/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#472732 with a few plot-related differences]. That is in fact the one considered as the "original script" in production notes. It was followed by the storyboards, a refined script sent to the seiyuu, and the final one published on the DVDs. Other interviews also indicate the change from [[Neon Genesis Evangelion Proposal#Apostolos|his more neutral earlier self]] as a little boy with a pet cat was mostly Satsukawa's idea. Sadamoto, character designer and author of the [[Neon Genesis Evangelion (manga)|Evangelion manga]] also notes how Satsukawa expanded Anno's initial outline significantly.<ref>The conclusion is that it probably was Akio Satsukawa. Nagisa can also be read as Messenger, perhaps he came up with the name when he was writing the script. We all think it fits Akio’s taste. What struck me most was how Akio expanded the world, he made Kaworu a JUNE character……Or I should say a male/male tanbi(“aesthetic”) romances character that went berserk. [...]</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">Yes, Yes. In the end, Anno changed it to the bath scene. Anno took Akio’s idea into a very unique perspective, which end with this Kaworu who give you a decadent feeling, in my option. There is one thing that doesn’t need to cover up: they wrote EVA’s script as long as possible. In other words, the script they gave Anno had two Eps length, then Anno modified it into a story. So I think he probably cut off a lot of Kaworu’s story.</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">- Shizo/Parano interview "judging Hideaki Anno in his absence"</ref><ref>M: That interview in which he pushes all responsibility to Satsukawa is interesting. But when we came up with the original idea, did it start out as such?</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">H: His descriptions are def top-notch. [Indicating, he is a good writer]</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">M: So when I stated we must change it, it became Anno’s expert bathing.</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">A: His favourite public baths.</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">H: Why hand-holding though?</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">M: Because thats what the script said.</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">H: (flips to the relevant page of the script) it says “touched his hand”. Isn’t it touched, but you drew “hold” (laughs).</del></div></td><td colspan="2"> </td></tr>
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</table>UrsusArctoshttps://wiki.evageeks.org/index.php?title=Resources:Episode_24_Draft_2_(Translation)&diff=107728&oldid=prevFelipeFritschF at 05:53, 22 May 20212021-05-22T05:53:50Z<p></p>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second early draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://web.archive.org/web/20070311143105/http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>"脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref><ref>"As for the Evangelion manga, Sadamoto claims to have made it entirely by himself, without consulting with anyone, so any differences with the anime were all decided solely by him; this in contrast to the anime where all decisions were made as a group, all sitting in the same room and arguing." - [https://wiki.evageeks.org/Statements_by_Evangelion_Staff#Yoshiyuki_Sadamoto%3A_Milan_Manga_Festival_.282013.29 Sadamoto Milan Manga Festival 2013]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected Anno and the rest of staff.'''</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second early draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://web.archive.org/web/20070311143105/http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>"脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline"><br>Illustrations included in this magazine are also made by a third-party doujinshi author, and are not official.</ins></ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref><ref>"As for the Evangelion manga, Sadamoto claims to have made it entirely by himself, without consulting with anyone, so any differences with the anime were all decided solely by him; this in contrast to the anime where all decisions were made as a group, all sitting in the same room and arguing." - [https://wiki.evageeks.org/Statements_by_Evangelion_Staff#Yoshiyuki_Sadamoto%3A_Milan_Manga_Festival_.282013.29 Sadamoto Milan Manga Festival 2013]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected Anno and the rest of staff.'''</div></td></tr>
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According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>"脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref><ref> As for the Evangelion manga, Sadamoto claims to have made it entirely by himself, without consulting with anyone, so any differences with the anime were all decided solely by him; this in contrast to the anime where all decisions were made as a group, all sitting in the same room and arguing. - [https://wiki.evageeks.org/Statements_by_Evangelion_Staff#Yoshiyuki_Sadamoto%3A_Milan_Manga_Festival_.282013.29 Sadamoto Milan Manga Festival 2013]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected Anno and the rest of staff.'''</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second early draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://web.archive.org/web/20070311143105/http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>"脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref><ref><ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">"</ins>As for the Evangelion manga, Sadamoto claims to have made it entirely by himself, without consulting with anyone, so any differences with the anime were all decided solely by him; this in contrast to the anime where all decisions were made as a group, all sitting in the same room and arguing.<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">" </ins>- [https://wiki.evageeks.org/Statements_by_Evangelion_Staff#Yoshiyuki_Sadamoto%3A_Milan_Manga_Festival_.282013.29 Sadamoto Milan Manga Festival 2013]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected Anno and the rest of staff.'''</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There are several scenes and plot elements that were removed or moved to other episodes, indicating how early in conceptualizing the story Anno and staff were when these drafts were written. For instance, Shinji playing the cello was Satsukawa's idea according to Anno<ref>Anno: That’s right, that’s right. There was a scene in a music room after an evacuation, when no one was there.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There are several scenes and plot elements that were removed or moved to other episodes, indicating how early in conceptualizing the story Anno and staff were when these drafts were written. For instance, Shinji playing the cello was Satsukawa's idea according to Anno<ref>Anno: That’s right, that’s right. There was a scene in a music room after an evacuation, when no one was there.</div></td></tr>
</table>FelipeFritschFhttps://wiki.evageeks.org/index.php?title=Resources:Episode_24_Draft_2_(Translation)&diff=107138&oldid=prevFelipeFritschF at 04:15, 8 May 20212021-05-08T04:15:11Z<p></p>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second early draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://web.archive.org/web/20070311143105/http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>"脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected Anno and the rest of staff.'''</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second early draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://web.archive.org/web/20070311143105/http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>"脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]</ref><ref> As for the Evangelion manga, Sadamoto claims to have made it entirely by himself, without consulting with anyone, so any differences with the anime were all decided solely by him; this in contrast to the anime where all decisions were made as a group, all sitting in the same room and arguing. - [https://wiki.evageeks.org/Statements_by_Evangelion_Staff#Yoshiyuki_Sadamoto%3A_Milan_Manga_Festival_.282013.29 Sadamoto Milan Manga Festival 2013</ins>]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected Anno and the rest of staff.'''</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There are several scenes and plot elements that were removed or moved to other episodes, indicating how early in conceptualizing the story Anno and staff were when these drafts were written. For instance, Shinji playing the cello was Satsukawa's idea according to Anno<ref>Anno: That’s right, that’s right. There was a scene in a music room after an evacuation, when no one was there.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There are several scenes and plot elements that were removed or moved to other episodes, indicating how early in conceptualizing the story Anno and staff were when these drafts were written. For instance, Shinji playing the cello was Satsukawa's idea according to Anno<ref>Anno: That’s right, that’s right. There was a scene in a music room after an evacuation, when no one was there.</div></td></tr>
</table>FelipeFritschFhttps://wiki.evageeks.org/index.php?title=Resources:Episode_24_Draft_2_(Translation)&diff=105950&oldid=prevFelipeFritschF at 07:35, 19 March 20212021-03-19T07:35:46Z<p></p>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>- NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4</ref> It's also worth taking into account that Kaworu is apparently the only character [[Character Name Origins|not to be named by Anno himself]], but by Satsukawa, so it seems he had a lot more input in modifying this character early on and these drafts stand as an example of that, even though most of his ideas didn't make past Anno's approval.<ref> He wasn’t the last Angel from the baginning. At first, the information they gave me only said that Kaworu was a humanoid Angel who appeared at the finale stage of the Anime. But at that time, I had already worked out something similar—since the gradually appeared Angel all had different shapes and characteristics, they should become more closer to human. Then there also came with the subtitle “Cat and Transfer Student” when they were planing it. If I have to figure out Anno’s intention, I think he may awared the “Monster Messenger and Boy” (Ep.33) in The Return of Ultraman. It is where a monster named Muruchi appeared. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto</ref><ref>Anno: "[...] In the initial stages, he was a pretty boy who carried around a cat. The very first plot title was “The cat and the transfer student.” It was a story about transfer student carrying a cat coming to the school and so forth. As we went on with it, in episode 24, it had already moved away from the school, so. It would have still have been good if it had come between episodes 11 and 16, though."</ref> It seems safe to assume Kaworu as presented in these drafts is not Anno's brainchild, but Satsukawa's.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>- NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4</ref> It's also worth taking into account that <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[[</ins>Kaworu<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]] </ins>is apparently the only character [[Character Name Origins|not to be named by Anno himself]], but by Satsukawa, so it seems he had a lot more input in modifying this character early on and these drafts stand as an example of that, even though most of his ideas didn't make past Anno's approval.<ref> He wasn’t the last Angel from the baginning. At first, the information they gave me only said that Kaworu was a humanoid Angel who appeared at the finale stage of the Anime. But at that time, I had already worked out something similar—since the gradually appeared Angel all had different shapes and characteristics, they should become more closer to human. Then there also came with the subtitle “Cat and Transfer Student” when they were planing it. If I have to figure out Anno’s intention, I think he may awared the “Monster Messenger and Boy” (Ep.33) in The Return of Ultraman. It is where a monster named Muruchi appeared. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto</ref><ref>Anno: "[...] In the initial stages, he was a pretty boy who carried around a cat. The very first plot title was “The cat and the transfer student.” It was a story about transfer student carrying a cat coming to the school and so forth. As we went on with it, in episode 24, it had already moved away from the school, so. It would have still have been good if it had come between episodes 11 and 16, though."</ref> It seems safe to assume Kaworu as presented in these drafts is not Anno's brainchild, but Satsukawa's.</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of [[Lilith]] in [[Terminal Dogma]] in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.<ref>https://forum.evageeks.org/post/364688/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#364688</ref> This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. [[Ikuto Yamashita|Yamashita]], for instance, wanted Asuka to [[Sore o Nasumono|become a werewolf]]. In [[Evangelion 2.0]], [[Yoji Enokido|Enokido]] wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.<ref>[https://www.gwern.net/docs/eva/2010-crc#part-3 Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection]</ref></div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of [[Lilith]] in [[Terminal Dogma]] in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.<ref>https://forum.evageeks.org/post/364688/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#364688</ref> This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. [[Ikuto Yamashita|Yamashita]], for instance, wanted Asuka to [[Sore o Nasumono|become a werewolf]]. In [[Evangelion 2.0]], [[Yoji Enokido|Enokido]] wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.<ref>[https://www.gwern.net/docs/eva/2010-crc#part-3 Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection]</ref></div></td></tr>
</table>FelipeFritschFhttps://wiki.evageeks.org/index.php?title=Resources:Episode_24_Draft_2_(Translation)&diff=105593&oldid=prevFelipeFritschF at 15:42, 13 February 20212021-02-13T15:42:49Z<p></p>
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According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>"脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected Anno and the rest of staff.'''</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second early draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://web.archive.org/web/<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">20070311143105/http:/</ins>/homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">2</ins>-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">2</ins>-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>"脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected Anno and the rest of staff.'''</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There are several scenes and plot elements that were removed or moved to other episodes, indicating how early in conceptualizing the story Anno and staff were when these drafts were written. For instance, Shinji playing the cello was Satsukawa's idea according to Anno<ref>Anno: That’s right, that’s right. There was a scene in a music room after an evacuation, when no one was there.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>There are several scenes and plot elements that were removed or moved to other episodes, indicating how early in conceptualizing the story Anno and staff were when these drafts were written. For instance, Shinji playing the cello was Satsukawa's idea according to Anno<ref>Anno: That’s right, that’s right. There was a scene in a music room after an evacuation, when no one was there.</div></td></tr>
</table>FelipeFritschFhttps://wiki.evageeks.org/index.php?title=Resources:Episode_24_Draft_2_(Translation)&diff=105581&oldid=prevFelipeFritschF at 02:17, 11 February 20212021-02-11T02:17:58Z<p></p>
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According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then <del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">he </del>reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa<del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">"</del></ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script. The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." [https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members<ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified. </del>'''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected <del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">them</del>.'''</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second early draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://web.archive.org/web/<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">20071011104241</ins>/homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">1</ins>-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">1</ins>-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">and the descriptions of the production process in several official Evangelion publications</ins>, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">there are several staff meetings discussing the drafts. Finally, Anno </ins>reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref><ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">"</ins>脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script.The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">- </ins>[https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa Evangelion Original I]</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified.<ref>"The process of how these scripts reached the point of definitive drafts is exactly as follows.<br>First, Anno prepares a memo that simply writes out each episode’s idea. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo. Going through staff meetings that center on the director, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts and for the time being are finished. In addition, Anno directly goes over the scripts that the screenwriters have finished and the script becomes the definitive draft.'''Not matter how high their level of completeness is as TV anime scripts, the times when the scripts completed by the screenwriters do not match Anno’s sensibilities or creativity, do not pass.'''After the script’s definitive draft, Anno ends up revising and correcting even further in the storyboard stage. You can say there is a thorough system for producing the film according to Anno’s intent. - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowiZN8 Evangelion Original II]</ref></ins><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref> '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">Anno and the rest of staff</ins>.'''</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Anno: Around the time when you’re a middle school student, you often go with friends to public bath-houses and stuff, right? On the way home from school and so forth. Also, going there right after you go play at the beach, just as you are. There are more public baths in the boonies, you see. So it almost feels like a watering hole for men. Well, people don’t go washing each other’s backs or any skinship things like that. In any case, it’s a sort of place that you can all go to together, play there, and head home.</ref><ref>Interviewer: Speaking about the blushing, is it because Shinji was happy that someone said they like him?</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Anno: Around the time when you’re a middle school student, you often go with friends to public bath-houses and stuff, right? On the way home from school and so forth. Also, going there right after you go play at the beach, just as you are. There are more public baths in the boonies, you see. So it almost feels like a watering hole for men. Well, people don’t go washing each other’s backs or any skinship things like that. In any case, it’s a sort of place that you can all go to together, play there, and head home.</ref><ref>Interviewer: Speaking about the blushing, is it because Shinji was happy that someone said they like him?</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Anno: Yes, Shinji kun really didn’t experience carnal desire there.</ref> Anno also mentions he fixed up the later script in a more final form. [http://forum.evageeks.org/post/363606/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#363606 This script is available] in [[Evangelion Original|Evangelion Original III]], it is the first one that includes Anno in the credits, and is very similar to the version aired in Episode 24, [http://forum.evageeks.org/post/472732/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#472732 with a few plot-related differences]. That is in fact the one considered as the "original script" in production notes. It was followed by the storyboards, a refined script sent to the seiyuu, and the final one published on the DVDs. <del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">Some other </del>interviews also indicate <del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[[Kaworu|Kaworu's]] </del>change from [[Neon Genesis Evangelion Proposal#Apostolos|his more neutral earlier self]] as a little boy with a pet cat was mostly Satsukawa's idea<ref>The conclusion is that it probably was Akio Satsukawa. Nagisa can also be read as Messenger, perhaps he came up with the name when he was writing the script. We all think it fits Akio’s taste. What struck me most was how Akio expanded the world, he made Kaworu a JUNE character……Or I should say a male/male tanbi(“aesthetic”) romances character that went berserk. [...]</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Anno: Yes, Shinji kun really didn’t experience carnal desire there.</ref> Anno also mentions he fixed up the later script in a more final form. [http://forum.evageeks.org/post/363606/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#363606 This script is available] in [[Evangelion Original|Evangelion Original III]], it is the first one that includes Anno in the credits, and is very similar to the version aired in Episode 24, [http://forum.evageeks.org/post/472732/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#472732 with a few plot-related differences]. That is in fact the one considered as the "original script" in production notes. It was followed by the storyboards, a refined script sent to the seiyuu, and the final one published on the DVDs. <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">Other </ins>interviews also indicate <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">the </ins>change from [[Neon Genesis Evangelion Proposal#Apostolos|his more neutral earlier self]] as a little boy with a pet cat was mostly Satsukawa's idea<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">. Sadamoto, character designer and author of the [[Neon Genesis Evangelion (manga)|Evangelion manga]] also notes how Satsukawa expanded Anno's initial outline significantly.</ins><ref>The conclusion is that it probably was Akio Satsukawa. Nagisa can also be read as Messenger, perhaps he came up with the name when he was writing the script. We all think it fits Akio’s taste. What struck me most was how Akio expanded the world, he made Kaworu a JUNE character……Or I should say a male/male tanbi(“aesthetic”) romances character that went berserk. [...]</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Interviewer: Is this what they called the dreamy first script?</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Interviewer: Is this what they called the dreamy first script?</div></td></tr>
<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Yes, Yes. In the end, Anno changed it to the bath scene. Anno took Akio’s idea into a very unique perspective, which end with this Kaworu who give you a decadent feeling, in my option. There is one thing that doesn’t need to cover up: they wrote EVA’s script as long as possible. In other words, the script they gave Anno had two Eps length, then Anno modified it into a story. So I think he probably cut off a lot of Kaworu’s story.</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Yes, Yes. In the end, Anno changed it to the bath scene. Anno took Akio’s idea into a very unique perspective, which end with this Kaworu who give you a decadent feeling, in my option. There is one thing that doesn’t need to cover up: they wrote EVA’s script as long as possible. In other words, the script they gave Anno had two Eps length, then Anno modified it into a story. So I think he probably cut off a lot of Kaworu’s story.</div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>- NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4</ref> It's also worth taking into account that Kaworu is apparently the only character [[Character Name Origins|not to be named by Anno himself]], but by Satsukawa, so it seems he had a lot more input in modifying this character early on and these drafts stand as an example of that, even though most of his ideas didn't make past Anno's approval.<ref> He wasn’t the last Angel from the baginning. At first, the information they gave me only said that Kaworu was a humanoid Angel who appeared at the finale stage of the Anime. But at that time, I had already worked out something similar—since the gradually appeared Angel all had different shapes and characteristics, they should become more closer to human. Then there also came with the subtitle “Cat and Transfer Student” when they were planing it. If I have to figure out Anno’s intention, I think he may awared the “Monster Messenger and Boy” (Ep.33) in The Return of Ultraman. It is where a monster named Muruchi appeared. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto</ref><ref>Anno: "[...] In the initial stages, he was a pretty boy who carried around a cat. The very first plot title was “The cat and the transfer student.” It was a story about transfer student carrying a cat coming to the school and so forth. As we went on with it, in episode 24, it had already moved away from the school, so. It would have still have been good if it had come between episodes 11 and 16, though."</ref></div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>- NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4</ref> It's also worth taking into account that Kaworu is apparently the only character [[Character Name Origins|not to be named by Anno himself]], but by Satsukawa, so it seems he had a lot more input in modifying this character early on and these drafts stand as an example of that, even though most of his ideas didn't make past Anno's approval.<ref> He wasn’t the last Angel from the baginning. At first, the information they gave me only said that Kaworu was a humanoid Angel who appeared at the finale stage of the Anime. But at that time, I had already worked out something similar—since the gradually appeared Angel all had different shapes and characteristics, they should become more closer to human. Then there also came with the subtitle “Cat and Transfer Student” when they were planing it. If I have to figure out Anno’s intention, I think he may awared the “Monster Messenger and Boy” (Ep.33) in The Return of Ultraman. It is where a monster named Muruchi appeared. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto</ref><ref>Anno: "[...] In the initial stages, he was a pretty boy who carried around a cat. The very first plot title was “The cat and the transfer student.” It was a story about transfer student carrying a cat coming to the school and so forth. As we went on with it, in episode 24, it had already moved away from the school, so. It would have still have been good if it had come between episodes 11 and 16, though."</ref> <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">It seems safe to assume Kaworu as presented in these drafts is not Anno's brainchild, but Satsukawa's.</ins></div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of [[Lilith]] in [[Terminal Dogma]] in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.<ref>https://forum.evageeks.org/post/364688/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#364688</ref> This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. [[Ikuto Yamashita|Yamashita]], for instance, wanted Asuka to [[Sore o Nasumono|become a werewolf]]. In [[Evangelion 2.0]], [[Yoji Enokido|Enokido]] wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.<ref>[https://www.gwern.net/docs/eva/2010-crc#part-3 Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection]</ref></div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of [[Lilith]] in [[Terminal Dogma]] in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.<ref>https://forum.evageeks.org/post/364688/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#364688</ref> This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. [[Ikuto Yamashita|Yamashita]], for instance, wanted Asuka to [[Sore o Nasumono|become a werewolf]]. In [[Evangelion 2.0]], [[Yoji Enokido|Enokido]] wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.<ref>[https://www.gwern.net/docs/eva/2010-crc#part-3 Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection]</ref></div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second early draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://web.archive.org/web/20070311143105/http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then he reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa"</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script. The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa</ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified. '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected them.'''</div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>The second early draft of [[Episode 24]] printed in the magazine ''JUNE'' Supplement 09/1996 issue (『別冊JUNE』1996年9月号). Originally fetched from [http://web.archive.org/web/20070311143105/http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm http://homepage3.nifty.com/kyrie/story24-2-1.htm]. According to that source, the drafts were credited to [[Akio Satsukawa]] (薩川昭夫), an Evangelion scriptwriter that also worked with [[Hideaki Anno|Anno]] in nine other episodes, including [[Episode 6]], [[Episode 9]], [[Episode 15]] and [[Episode 21]]. According to Anno in an interview to this same magazine, he first gives scriptwriters the general outline of an episode and has them organize it into dialogue and a story proper, then he reviews the script and changes it as necessary, according to his own directorial intent, and this is not the only case where a writer came up with something different than what Anno originally asked (see below). These drafts were not written or approved by Anno and are credited to Satsukawa alone.<ref>脚本:薩川昭夫 "Screenplay: Akio Satsukawa"</ref><ref>"In TV anime, as the staff meetings between producers and the directors proceed, the screenwriters write the script. The manuscript goes through the "first draft", "second draft", and the script becomes the "definitive draft." The director draws the storyboard based on the script that has become the "definitive draft". The storyboard is the movie’s blueprint, which has been filled in with the composition of each cut, acting, lines, second count and the like. In anime, the greater part of the director’s "directing" process occurs in the phase of drawing this storyboard. It is not unusual for the contents to change in the storyboard stage. There are also cases when it becomes almost a completely different story.<br>Among all 26 episodes of the TV version of “Neon Genesis Evangelion”, Director Anno himself wrote the scripts for five episodes, and is credited jointly with other screenwriters for the scripts of 20 episodes. The number of scripts that were jointly credited are the definitive drafts of scripts based on plots by director Anno written by screenwriters and gone over directly by director Anno. [..] Just by looking at these numbers, you will understand how much director Anno pulled the series together by his personal authorship." <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[</ins>https://webcitation.org/5mYowhERa <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">Evangelion Original I]</ins></ref> These are the early drafts submitted by Satsukawa to Anno, however, as submitted, they were rejected by Anno and multiple staff members<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline"><ref> "This book is a collection of scripts for "Neon Genesis Evangelion." Excluding the stories whose scripts Anno handled directly, the scripts traced the following process in reaching the point of definitive drafts. First, Anno prepares an idea memo for each episode. The screenwriters write a script based on that memo and go through staff meetings that center on the director. On behalf of the staff, the screenwriters go through the second and third drafts. And then Anno directly corrects and revises the finished script and it is completed. As you’ll understand if you see the text, in scripts that are completed this way, the directions regarding the screen image are meticulous and the action and staging are quite concretely depicted. Therefore, the storyboard that is written in characters (letters), that is, the "wordboard-al" hue is also strong." - [https://webcitation.org/5mYowkBjV Evangelion Original III]</ref></ins>, and instead were rewritten and heavily modified. '''As such, they should not at all be considered Anno's original authoral intent, because they were not written by him, and he in fact rejected them.'''</div></td></tr>
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</table>FelipeFritschFhttps://wiki.evageeks.org/index.php?title=Resources:Episode_24_Draft_2_(Translation)&diff=103406&oldid=prevFelipeFritschF at 21:45, 17 March 20202020-03-17T21:45:42Z<p></p>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>- NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4</ref> It's also worth taking into account that Kaworu is apparently the only character not to be named by Anno himself, but by Satsukawa, so it seems he had a lot more input in modifying this character early on and these drafts stand as an example of that, even though most of his ideas didn't make past Anno's approval.<ref> He wasn’t the last Angel from the baginning. At first, the information they gave me only said that Kaworu was a humanoid Angel who appeared at the finale stage of the Anime. But at that time, I had already worked out something similar—since the gradually appeared Angel all had different shapes and characteristics, they should become more closer to human. Then there also came with the subtitle “Cat and Transfer Student” when they were planing it. If I have to figure out Anno’s intention, I think he may awared the “Monster Messenger and Boy” (Ep.33) in The Return of Ultraman. It is where a monster named Muruchi appeared. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto</ref><ref>Anno: "[...] In the initial stages, he was a pretty boy who carried around a cat. The very first plot title was “The cat and the transfer student.” It was a story about transfer student carrying a cat coming to the school and so forth. As we went on with it, in episode 24, it had already moved away from the school, so. It would have still have been good if it had come between episodes 11 and 16, though."</ref></div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>- NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4</ref> It's also worth taking into account that Kaworu is apparently the only character <ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">[[Character Name Origins|</ins>not to be named by Anno himself<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">]]</ins>, but by Satsukawa, so it seems he had a lot more input in modifying this character early on and these drafts stand as an example of that, even though most of his ideas didn't make past Anno's approval.<ref> He wasn’t the last Angel from the baginning. At first, the information they gave me only said that Kaworu was a humanoid Angel who appeared at the finale stage of the Anime. But at that time, I had already worked out something similar—since the gradually appeared Angel all had different shapes and characteristics, they should become more closer to human. Then there also came with the subtitle “Cat and Transfer Student” when they were planing it. If I have to figure out Anno’s intention, I think he may awared the “Monster Messenger and Boy” (Ep.33) in The Return of Ultraman. It is where a monster named Muruchi appeared. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto</ref><ref>Anno: "[...] In the initial stages, he was a pretty boy who carried around a cat. The very first plot title was “The cat and the transfer student.” It was a story about transfer student carrying a cat coming to the school and so forth. As we went on with it, in episode 24, it had already moved away from the school, so. It would have still have been good if it had come between episodes 11 and 16, though."</ref></div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of [[Lilith]] in [[Terminal Dogma]] in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.<ref>https://forum.evageeks.org/post/364688/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#364688</ref> This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. [[Ikuto Yamashita|Yamashita]], for instance, wanted Asuka to [[Sore o Nasumono|become a werewolf]]. In [[Evangelion 2.0]], [[Yoji Enokido|Enokido]] wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.<ref>[https://www.gwern.net/docs/eva/2010-crc#part-3 Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection]</ref></div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of [[Lilith]] in [[Terminal Dogma]] in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.<ref>https://forum.evageeks.org/post/364688/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#364688</ref> This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. [[Ikuto Yamashita|Yamashita]], for instance, wanted Asuka to [[Sore o Nasumono|become a werewolf]]. In [[Evangelion 2.0]], [[Yoji Enokido|Enokido]] wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.<ref>[https://www.gwern.net/docs/eva/2010-crc#part-3 Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection]</ref></div></td></tr>
</table>FelipeFritschFhttps://wiki.evageeks.org/index.php?title=Resources:Episode_24_Draft_2_(Translation)&diff=103405&oldid=prevFelipeFritschF at 21:44, 17 March 20202020-03-17T21:44:41Z<p></p>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'>−</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #ffe49c; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>- NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4</ref> </div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #a3d3ff; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>- NGE Storyboards Collection, Vol.3-4<ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline"></ref> It's also worth taking into account that Kaworu is apparently the only character not to be named by Anno himself, but by Satsukawa, so it seems he had a lot more input in modifying this character early on and these drafts stand as an example of that, even though most of his ideas didn't make past Anno's approval.<ref> He wasn’t the last Angel from the baginning. At first, the information they gave me only said that Kaworu was a humanoid Angel who appeared at the finale stage of the Anime. But at that time, I had already worked out something similar—since the gradually appeared Angel all had different shapes and characteristics, they should become more closer to human. Then there also came with the subtitle “Cat and Transfer Student” when they were planing it. If I have to figure out Anno’s intention, I think he may awared the “Monster Messenger and Boy” (Ep.33) in The Return of Ultraman. It is where a monster named Muruchi appeared. - All About Kaworu Nagisa interview with Sadamoto</ref><ref>Anno: "[...] In the initial stages, he was a pretty boy who carried around a cat. The very first plot title was “The cat and the transfer student.” It was a story about transfer student carrying a cat coming to the school and so forth. As we went on with it, in episode 24, it had already moved away from the school, so. It would have still have been good if it had come between episodes 11 and 16, though."</ins></ref></div></td></tr>
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<tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of [[Lilith]] in [[Terminal Dogma]] in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.<ref>https://forum.evageeks.org/post/364688/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#364688</ref> This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. [[Ikuto Yamashita|Yamashita]], for instance, wanted Asuka to [[Sore o Nasumono|become a werewolf]]. In [[Evangelion 2.0]], [[Yoji Enokido|Enokido]] wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.<ref>[https://www.gwern.net/docs/eva/2010-crc#part-3 Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection]</ref></div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background-color: #f8f9fa; color: #222; font-size: 88%; border-style: solid; border-width: 1px 1px 1px 4px; border-radius: 0.33em; border-color: #eaecf0; vertical-align: top; white-space: pre-wrap;"><div>Comparing this draft to other available ones, Draft 2 was likely written at least some eight months before Episode 24's eventual broadcast, possibly even earlier, with the most notable plot difference being the absence of [[Lilith]] in [[Terminal Dogma]] in both drafts, which was revealed in the show also in Episode 15.<ref>https://forum.evageeks.org/post/364688/NGE-Ep24-Script-First-and-Second-Drafts/#364688</ref> This is, in fact, one of many, many rejected ideas from individual staff members that didn't make it past Anno or anyone else. [[Ikuto Yamashita|Yamashita]], for instance, wanted Asuka to [[Sore o Nasumono|become a werewolf]]. In [[Evangelion 2.0]], [[Yoji Enokido|Enokido]] wanted Mari to say "anta baka" and completely replace Asuka, including kissing Shinji, in one of the movie's at least 16 different drafts.<ref>[https://www.gwern.net/docs/eva/2010-crc#part-3 Evangelion 2.0 Complete Records Collection]</ref></div></td></tr>
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